The Feeder - Writers Forum

Johnnyelvis · 08-25-2007, 01:31 PM

Not for people of a delicate nature. Some graphic descriptions here.

Her skin is really thick and grey. Tough as rhino hide. I scrub it everyday with a long handled brush and a bucketful of hot soapy water. She says she cannot feel the biting bristles as I scrub her thighs. It gets hard sometimes to lift up the massive layers of skin and fat to clean out the dirt from underneath. Her sensitive parts, her face, hands, feet, breasts and privates I wash with a flannel and sometimes it gets really hot and heavy and she likes it a lot when I stimulate her heaving frame. When she comes, she does so by the glassful, and there is nothing better than a refreshing drink of thick, freshly squirted lady juice.

The last time she was able to stand on her own two feet was about two years ago. I filmed it. It was a very special moment for us. She has developed some bed sores that have gotten very nasty now and again and have to be treated with antibiotics and lots of loving care. I don't mind doing this though because she is my wife and I love her.

She was a big girl when we first met, around the fifteen stone mark, and we got married and she got happier. I am a professional cook to trade and she was happy eating so I did all the cooking, huge roasts and curries and potato dishes and fish and pasta. On the days I took off from cooking, I would come home knackered from a hard days shift, and I would see her eating pizza after pizza and I couldn't be happier. I like taking care of my wife.

Her breathing started to get bad, and that's when we decided maybe she shouldn't move around as much. She watches a lot of television, the day time soaps, she likes to read and before she got too big she liked to go on the internet and surf.

Making love got to be a struggle, so now she just sucks me off, or I slide my hand in her love tunnel and play about. She finds it hard to cum, and I'll be fucked if I can find her clitoris. I don't really like going down on her though -- for one, there are layers of fat on your head threatening to squeeze the life out of you, and two..the smell. It takes at least four good handwashes with a strong disenfectant to get rid of the smell after I have been playing with her nether regions. A small sacrifice you have to pay in this game called marriage.

The doctors come around and they are fighting for her to get her stomach stapled and some major surgery done so she can lose some weight. We both fight this as it is not what we want, but sometimes she says she would like to be a little slimmer so she can go for a walk now and again, but I get those silly thoughts out of her head. Why does she need to do anything when she has me?

I sleep in a room upstairs. She has a reinforced bed in the living room to take her massive frame. The curtains are always shut because people like to stare in and make faces and call her names. We used to get abusive phone calls until we went ex directory.

We have managed to supplement her feeding with taking photos and videos of her and putting them on the internet. We get a lot of hits and there is a big fan base for this kind of thing. We get some of my friends around and they all like to play with her. She sucks them all off and they spray their wad all over her. Then I get the scrubbing brush and wash her. People pay quite a bit to see this.

What do I do when she dies? It will happen and I will be sad, thank God for our extracurricular activities that will be able to pay for her removal from the house. The days of getting her even through the patio doors at the back of the house are long gone. The east side wall will have to be removed.

But when she does go, I know of a girl in Germany who is quite large and she lost her husband recently. I have been sending her tentative emails from my room upstairs, and we have been getting along famously.

Holden Blake · 08-25-2007, 04:28 PM

Hmm..this is very strange. I'm not sure what to think about it to be honest. I got the impression that the narrator loved his wife but then the last paragraph kind of threw me. So I guess this is a man who has a thing for big girls..I don't really get where the storyline is going..

Johnnyelvis · 08-25-2007, 04:47 PM

Holden, thats just the story - he has a thing for big girls and making them bigger. And he will keep on doing it no matter how many die in his stead. Even if it takes years for them to die, he likes the metamorphisis from independent to dependent. I really wrote this to see if the written word could actually gross you out. I felt a little naseous after writing it, so I guess it did the trick.

snorrie · 08-25-2007, 06:38 PM

I would like a close up of this story. The story isn't that personal and really doesn't drag the reader into the characters. I've seen this plot before, but nothing that really catches my attention. Take you time on it, give some dialog, interraction betweent he two. I'd like to see how you interpret this plot on a more personal level. Good luck.

JayLampert · 08-25-2007, 09:56 PM

Awesome. Didn't gross me out but I was suprised when it got to 'by the glassful'.

I like stuff like this

Shadow Reeves · 08-25-2007, 10:58 PM

i have to say that it had no depth, if it was not writen seriously thaen thats ok, but i cant say it was a good read....

Johnna · 08-26-2007, 12:47 AM

I had to pause after the first paragraph to settle my stomach a bit. I think if you were aiming for grossing people out, it worked.

However, the storyline could use work. Why not try a little dialogue between the two, a scene or something? I don't know.

Anyway, the descriptions were great. Good job.

DLFerguson · 08-26-2007, 12:52 AM

I'd like to see more dialog and more interaction between the narrator and his wife. As it is now it's short, hard punching and to the point but that was also a drawback for me. I wanted to know more about their highly unusual situation.

Johnnyelvis · 08-26-2007, 03:33 AM

Thanks folks, I shall see if I can find their voices.