SeanFields

WARNING: CONTAINS STRONG LANGUAGE AND VIOLENCE.



I’ve never known pain like this. The burning, seething, anger mixed with some sort of weird sadness. The longing yet disgust. She’s getting me good.

“I know you love me but I’m just not ready for this. For all of this.” She spoke with mock frailty.

You made me promises you bitch! You said forever and now look at you. Acting as if this is hurting you more than it’s hurting me, get over yourself.

“I need you Steph. I need you in my life. You finish me. Without you, I don’t know what I am!”

I feel like throwing this phone at the wall and pretending this conversation wasn’t happening. I will not cry. I WILL NOT!

“It’s not you it’s me.”

Don’t give me that shit! That’s a cop out. You uncaring bitch!

“What’s wrong with you that we can’t fix together?”

I’ll kill you for this! I will! This pain, the lies, I bet she was fucking Tommy that weekend I was away just like everyone told me. I bet she lied about that too. I would be willing to bet she has had many a midnight frolic, the whore!

“Craig, this is something I have to do on my own. I told you that. I feel so smothered, like I am drowning and I can’t catch my breath. Please don’t hate me.”

Don’t hate you? You just killed everything nice in me. Love doesn’t exist. All I have to look forward to now is death. Why don’t we just hurry that along?

“I could never hate you. Not really. I love you now and forever. I always have.”

If you only knew my thoughts bitch. The other half of me. Do you think I take medication for fun! There is more here than you can imagine. If I must die I will take you with me. So help me God!

“Craig, I will always be your friend this doesn’t mean we can’t still be in each others lives.”

You want to be in my life? After throwing me away like trash? Like garbage? Oh that’s rich. Really you should goon some comedy show. Don’t play me for a fool!

“No we can’t. I could never accept you being with someone else. I couldn’t pretend not to be jealous or that I don’t love you anymore.”

I would kill you both. You want to flaunt your fuck buddy in my face? Is that it? Some nerve you have. I gave you everything! Everything in me! There is nothing left. No more Craig, only the other. The other in my head who is capable of doing all the things Craig could only wish he was strong enough to do.

“Craig don’t be that way. We have so many wonderful memories together. We don’t have to lose our friendship.”

This is your fault whore. Don’t try to turn this around on me. Don’t you do it! Oh I can’t wait to watch you bleed, to hear you scream in pain as I cut your heart out and let you watch me eat it!

“This is a choice you are making Stephanie. Not me. You are throwing all this away. Do you even care you are hurting me or is this all about you?”

Stupid cunt trying to manipulate me.

“Craig I just can’t handle the weirdness anymore. You sit around for hours staring at the walls, listening to Pink Floyd. You say you aren’t on drugs but somehow that makes it worse. We never even do anything together. When we are near each other you just stare at me. It’s all too weird.”

Oh God now she has done it. Now I’m crazy? Oh, you are so about to learn what crazy is. You are so about to learn what the other is going to do. NAH NAH NAH NAH he’s gonna get you. HA HA! It’s almost funny.

“When was the last time you invited me to anything Steph? When was the last time you stopped over except to get something from Tommy? Name one!

“Oh my God Craig. See what I mean? You are so crazy. We just went to see a movie last weekend.”

Yeah but you sat with your hand in Tommy’s lap all night you disgusting ho bag.

“Yeah but Tommy went too. When do we ever get to do anything just the two of us?”

“Never and we never will. I don’t want to even talk about this anymore you psycho!”

Good I don’t want to talk either. I just want to cut you. Cut, cut, cut, slice, slice, and slice lets all roll the dice. How many cuts does it take to get to the center of a tootsie roll pop? No more control…….LALALA.

“Let’s not start calling names. I thought you wanted to keep this civil?”

Civil, Craig you mush hog. Don’t let her think you want to be nice. No wait yeah lets end it nicely that way she won’t be scared when we show up. How big a knife are we going to use?

“I do want to keep it civil Craig but I’m just not putting up with this stuff anymore. I love you in a friendly let’s have dinner but no movie kind of way. I don’t love you anymore.”

I’ll make you love me. I’ll make you beg me to love you back just before I slit your throat. You don’t know what you’ve done yet bitch. You have no idea!

“You do love me you just don’t know it. I can prove it to you. Please just give me a chance.”

A chance to dice your pretty little face.

“No Craig.”

Yes, it’s time Craigy Waigy. It’s time to let go of all the fear. Let me take care of this. The other will take care of this for you. Let me loose Craig. Let me out!

“Ok.”

“Ok? Fine I’ll talk to you later Craig.”

“Ok.”

Good Craig. No one is going to take what is ours anymore. Someone just came in. Who could that be? We have things to do.

“Hey Craig sorry about the phone man. I’ll get it turned back on tomorrow. I forgot to pay the stupid bill.” Tommy said as he barged into the room.

“Oh is it turned off?”

“Yeah space cadet it’s been off since yesterday.”

“Didn’t notice.”

“Dude you need to get out, its Friday night.”

“Yeah well I have no where to go.”

“Why don’t you come to the movies with me and Stephanie again? I know you feel like a third wheel but maybe she can bring a friend this time.”

“Sure sure.”

“Ok man get ready we leave in half an hour.”

“Alright then.”

Great, get the knife Craig. There you go. Feels nice doesn’t it? Tonight, we get even.

JayLampert

I'm gonna respond to this as a general reader rather than someone who knows what their talking about.

I thought that was awesome. My sort of thing.

At the points where he first mentions Tommy, I thought prehaps Tommy was imaginary but then you nailed me with a double twist.

Great read, keep it up.

Holden Blake

This was bloody brilliant!! Loved the whole skitso thing you had going on. The way he taunted himself with 'Craigy Waigy' and the 'Let me out' part was great. It really leaves you wanted more. Excellent piece.

Johnna

Oh, my. This was really scary. The twist makes it so much better. I was seriously entranced, felt like I was there in Craig's head.

The only thing that threw me off the flow of the story was when Tommy started talking. There was little transition and I wasn't sure who it was at first. Maybe try something like: "Tommy barged into the room. "Hey, Craig..."" and then finish that dialogue.

Other than that, this story is excellent!

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KaiBailey

Hahaha, this story was turning out to be a bit to heavy for my tastes, but the ending just made it all the more enjoyable! Very good writing in that sense.

The only thing I thought didn't fit in was this line:

"Oh that’s rich. Really you should goon some comedy show. Don’t play me for a fool!"

It just doesn't seem to fit in as well with all the other thoughts. Oh! And I thought that the refference to Pink Floyd might be a little bit to practical. Perhaps mention something that's a bit more universal for a crazy person? For example, staring at walls and listening to Tchaikovsky all the time would be real freakin' weird.

Just my input, though! Just throwing it out there,

This is a good peice, man. I had a good time reading it.

Johnnyelvis

Ho bag; a phrase that should be used much, much more.

Not a bad story this one - lovely twist at the end, made me chuckle - a few minor typos, but I'm sure if you read the story out loud, you'll catch them easy enough. And I agree with Johnna re: Tommy. Maybe have Tommy come into the room and Craig only hears the static of a broken line or something.

Good stuff, will read your other stuff with interest.

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Amers

Very good story, I just wanted to read more and more, wondering what his next thought would gonna be! It's freaky, but I like that! The way the 'other' Craig talks to 'good' Craig lol, is very nicely done!