Zombies - Writers Forum

ShadowZero007 · 07-29-2007, 10:40 PM

I've always been a huge fan of the Zombie Genre, and its been an aspiration of mine to write a full length zombie move. Sadly im not to patient so I never get around to writing long scripts. (If by some chance I actually do bother writing one) Well yeah this is just a short story about zombies, and a guy who has to cope with it. So enjoy and leave some feedback plz. Its intended to be slightly humorous by the way

Zombies. I hate that word so much. I remember back when the world still made sense, me and my friends would always talk about zombie survival plans, wether Resident Evil enhanced the Zombie scenario or made it ridiculous, whether or not the 28 series was part of the Zombie genre. Hell I owned the Zombie Survival Guide, and yearned hopelessely for World War Z. "Shoot em in the head" Yeah sounds simple. "They can only be killed by removing the head or destroying the brain" heh id like to see those guys try killing a Zombie with a broom. Never see that in a movie do you. Sadly ive done it. Took a good few minutes of bashing. Then it broke and I was forced to shover the splinter ended side of the brrom into its throat. Of course, this was a while after I broke my bass bashing away at 3 zombies which had come in through my window......
I used to love Shaun of the Dead. Sadly the comedy runs a bit dry when you actually leave the front door open. That was probably the biggest mistake ive made so far. My parents are jerks. They happned to be out of town when the invasion hit. They called saying theyre well in a goverment bunker. I replied with I had to drag the fridge upstairs then break the stairs down with a shovel. Took three days work non stop but I did it. Needed one hell of a shower afterwards though. To bad the plumbing had stopped working about three days previous to that. I used to keep in contact with my friends. Id call em twice a day see how they were doing. One by on they all stopped answering. Except for Michael, he called to tell me he had lost a leg and had been bit. Poor guy, haven't heard from him or anyone else since.
The cables out. i think i'm losing my mind. I knew I should have bought more movies while I had the chance. Owning the entire series of Futurama sounds good right now. But instead I got a new amp. Whoopedeedo I never even practice my bass playing. Guess it helped me kill two zombies that came in while I was destroying the stairs though. I'm getting pretty hungry though, most of the foods rotten, and im assuming Dominoes doesn't deliver under these circumstances. Pretty hot to. Dead of summer with broken air conditioning. Im amazed the power is still up. I give it another week. I'm not gonna be around to find out though. I've just taken the longest dump/wizz of my life (I held it in for three days cause of the godamn plumbing). I'm feeling pretty refreshed right now. There's only around ten of them outside. So shovel in hand I leap out my window and back into the world. DAMMIT!!!! Its raining well i'll leave tommorow....shovel in hand

snorrie · 07-29-2007, 11:38 PM

First of all you need to break this down into paragraphs. Second, it sounds more like a rant to me. It isn't really developed. I'm not sure what you were shooting for. Are you looking to get published or is this just a hobby and you wanted to throw something on the boards? You said you were impatient at writing. I can tell. But there's nothing wrong with just ranting. Maybe if you keep writing, you'll learn to slow down and develope your pieces better. Well, keep pluggin away. Good luck.

ShadowZero007 · 07-29-2007, 11:43 PM

This had no pre-wrting. I kinda judt typed what came to my head. It is a rant. Originally I was going to write an actual story, but I felt like going for this. Yeah I just felt like putting something up. Get a few ideas out of my head

snorrie · 07-29-2007, 11:46 PM

Well, I guess it will get you going. I know a lot of the time I just sit at my computer and nothing gets done but there is a lot going through my mind. Whatever gets you writing. Just try to channel your rant into something concrete. You need patience when writing. Good luck.

ShadowZero007 · 07-29-2007, 11:51 PM

Yeah i'll probably have a zombie related follow up soon

(By soon I mean if im up at 2 am with nothing better to do)

Colwyn Quaffer · 07-31-2007, 07:51 AM

Hi Shadow, why don't you go back to it and clean it up a bit.
I know what you're trying to do and where you're going with it but it needs to be checked, spaced and added to. Maybe make it into a diary entry so it can stand on its own better. Perhaps write a series of diary entries instead of a series of individual commentaries. Don't feel obliged to, of course, that's only a suggestion.
Hope that helps.

Johnna · 07-31-2007, 02:59 PM

This definitely needs to be edited and refined, but I like it.

The character reminds me almost EXACTLY of my older brother. He carries the Zombie Survival Guide with him wherever he goes, keeps a knife under his mattress, and has a backpack full of canned food beside his front door. Yes, I am dead serious.

Anyway, I like how the character thought being in a zombie movie/game would be fun then slowly realized that it's horrible. I'd like to see this edited and continued with. Keep it up.