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Old 07-27-2007, 08:04 PM   #1
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Smalltown High- "Episode 1"

It’s 6 A.M. The first day of school.

The radio comes on.

“Good mornin’ folks and all you out there listening to HLYE 81.6 today. The weather should be good all day with clear skies and highs of 96 degrees, perfect for Texas high school football. Lets go to the phones and see what the people of Smalltown have to say.”

Radio fades.

Brian slowly comes to a sit on top of his bed and stretches his arms out while yawning. He then walks out of bed and goes to the kitchen, like he does every morning, to see what his mom has made for breakfast. However, upon walking in, he notices a stern look on his fathers face.

“Son, we need to have a little talk before you head off ”, he says.

Brian’s father, Mr. Rodgers, takes off his glasses, and stares into his son’s eyes.

“Are you ready for this? You’ve got a big opportunity to showcase that talent of yours now that you are the starting quarterback. Coach Green promised me that if you practiced hard and you did what you had to do in the games that he would get some scouts out here to watch you. You know that your mom and I don’t have the money to send you off to college, so its make or break for you son. The time has come.”

“Do you want to go to college?” said Mr. Rodgers.

“Yes sir” says Brian.

Brian, realizing the pressure he now had to succeed and make his father proud, was no longer hungry. He goes to his room and starts putting on the clothes his mother has just ironed for him. He gives himself one last look in the mirror, takes a deep breath and heads for the door. Brian reaches in his pocket and pulls out his car keys. While driving to school he spots his friend, Johnny, walking down the street. He pulls over to pick him up.

“Sup’ bro” says Johnny.

Johnny was not the smartest in his class.

“Do you need a ride?” asked Brian.

“Yeah”





TO BE CONTINUED.


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Old 07-30-2007, 05:30 AM   #2
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"Lets go to the phones and see what the people of Smalltown have to say.”
since when does the weatherman take phone calls about peoples' opinions of the weather?

"comes to a sit on top of his bed "
take out 'a'

"He then walks out of bed and goes to the kitchen"
walking out of bed, now there's a neat trick.

There isn't much else I can say since it's not finished and it's pretty short. Not bad so far though.
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