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Short Stories Short Stories, usually between 500 and 2000 words.

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Old 06-30-2007, 03:38 PM   #1
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Clearing some space (200 words)

The old man sighed heavily as the morning light tripped his eyes open for the last time.

Slowly he manoeuvred out of his bed, gritting his teeth; grimacing against the pain of the arthritis.
I will do this, he thought. Nothing was going to shake his resolve.
Eventually he made it. After entering the shop he painfully passed his last tenner* to the assistant.
“Want it wrapped?” the assistant asked.
“No.” he replied.

Shuffling out of the shop he left to visit his wife using the spade as a crutch.
People stared, they didn’t understand; the State had taken everything.
NHS*. Pah! He thought angrily.
Finding a bench to sit on, he waited for darkness and when it arrived he summoned every last bit of his strength; then started.
Lightning bolts of pain shot through all his joints, especially his hands and back.
Blotting out the pain as much as he could; he focused on this one last task.
Because… if I’m going to be buried, the old man consoled himself once he was done, I needed to clear some space.
He gradually eased himself down into his wife’s now empty grave, and lying there… he shut his eyes — waiting.


*tenner - the colloquial word for ten UK pounds.
*NHS - The National Health Service of the UK; something which is paid for out of the taxes paid in the UK. (Service is debatable)
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Old 07-01-2007, 04:00 PM   #2
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This is pretty macbre, I'll give a once over whan I have more time. From a quick read pretty cool though.
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