About To Crash (254 words, funny) - Page 3 - Writers Forum

Funwriter · 06-30-2007, 04:11 PM

Richie,

Thank you sir!

Firebird · 07-01-2007, 05:38 PM

There'a no more for me to say, than it's a well written short piece, which did have me laughing.

Well written.

Thanks,

Firebird

Funwriter · 07-02-2007, 11:50 AM

Thank you Firebird.

penguinsfly03 · 07-03-2007, 02:40 PM

Ha! wheelchairs take a lot of work

Funwriter · 07-04-2007, 10:07 AM

yes, sir they do

Thanks for reading.

Frabes · 07-04-2007, 11:53 AM

I hesitate to comment on this and move it back up the forum, but I can't help myself.

Maybe this just says something about me, but I didn't really find this funny. When I read it, I smiled, but it was a smile like one would give a child after hearing his knock-knock joke.

While I'm sure you're very capable, this just seemed like an extended bad joke, not a short story.

I seem to be the exception though, so take it for what it's worth.

Funwriter · 07-04-2007, 04:10 PM

Frabes, hey, you have your opinion.

Thank you for reading.

Rob · 07-04-2007, 04:28 PM

As humour, I didn't find it that funny or particularly well written, to be honest. No-one will really care much about the writing, I guess, as they're just interested in the quick giggle they get from the It's A Plane, It's A Plane, It's A Plane ... NO! It's a wheelchair!!! gag. I think Az has a point. Writing this kind of stuff is easy. You could push yourself more with longer stuff. That's not meant to discourage. I think many of us have written plenty of these along the way. It's like the It's A Dog, It's A Dog, It's A Dog ... NO! It's a boy!! kind of story. Even when written well, the idea is extremely limited, it just relies on the author misleading the reader until the end, and once you've read a few the novelty wears off. Aside from the 'twist', there's no story. At some point, you'll probably want to push yourself and your writing a bit harder.

Nothing wrong with writing them, though.

Cheers,
Rob

Funwriter · 07-04-2007, 05:38 PM

Rob, I agree. Do me a favor and write us happy. Not sure, but I have yet to see anything you have produced. You critique, but do you write.. I think not.

Thanks for the cheese after the real critiques..

FW

Funwriter · 07-04-2007, 05:41 PM

Oh, I have sold this story twice now.. It has been in print twice...

I have the rights for the third print and more. So, thanks again.

FW

Funwriter · 07-04-2007, 05:41 PM

Oh, I have sold this story twice now.. It has been in print twice...

I have the rights for the third print and more. So, thanks again.

FW

Rob · 07-04-2007, 05:52 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Funwriter

Rob, I agree. Do me a favor and write us happy. Not sure, but I have yet to see anything you have produced. You critique, but do you write.. I think not.

Thanks for the cheese after the real critiques..

FW

I don't post much fiction here for critique these days. I have done in the past. I think the stories have been removed, but if you dig back far enough through my posts, the comments are still there.

I think the only moderately recent stories I have online these days are at JBWB:

http://www.jbwb.co.uk/rjsitd.htm

http://www.jbwb.co.uk/rjfi.htm

Some older stuff at Backhand Stories:

http://www.backhandstories.com/fiction/robflowers.htm

And Defenestration:

http://www.defenestrationmag.net/prose/rob.htm

http://www.defenestrationmag.net/prose/rob2.htm

But some of that's going back a long way.

The stuff on Skive is no longer there, the old Skive archives got taken down. The Blue Almonds site went down, had a couple of stories there. I think one of them was posted here first, so the comments may still be viewable - can't remember the title but it was about the tooth fairy. There's a six sentence piece on the Six Sentences site, went online today, was entered but unplaced in a comp. Have another six sentence piece accepted appearing on there on July 12th.

I think that's about it.

I do write. As I say, I don't post much for critique here these days. But some of the people here have seen my work before.

Cheers,
Rob

Rob · 07-04-2007, 06:08 PM

Actually, I forgot. I do have a story up here at WF, but not for crits. I posted and linked to it from another thread for some reason, now forgotten.

http://www.writingforums.com/showthread.php?t=78916

It's one of my earliest stories. Chronologically, it comes after Lap of the Gods on Defenestration, but not by much. It was the first story I ever plucked up the courage to enter into a writing competition, and placed 2nd (Milton Keynes Speakeasy writing comp, 2004).

Cheers,
Rob