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| Short Stories Short Stories, usually between 500 and 2000 words. |
06-24-2007, 04:53 AM
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Well, good for you... Jolly is a bit right here 
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06-24-2007, 11:03 AM
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Originally Posted by Jolly McJollyson
The incessant wallowing in self-pity was just too much. I couldn't finish.
Would you like any cheese to go with the whine?
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Just scroll a little up and you'd see > Creativity > Short Stories > Meantime girl. You mind the exaggeration so I can't do anything about it.
Also, sure, if it's up yours.  |
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06-24-2007, 11:04 AM
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Originally Posted by aimeefriedland
too much telling, not enough showinggg
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Yeah, I won't post pictures of people looking at their shoes to show anything  |
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06-24-2007, 11:12 AM
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Snappy, that.
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06-24-2007, 12:00 PM
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Originally Posted by space-dye-vest
Just scroll a little up and you'd see > Creativity > Short Stories > Meantime girl. You mind the exaggeration so I can't do anything about it.
Also, sure, if it's up yours. |
Creativity doesn't mean "be as derivative as possible, please!" |
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06-25-2007, 04:32 AM
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Criticising a piece doesn't mean "be as lame and logic-less as possible, please!"
On a serious note, there was no self-pity in the piece. It was just something certain women feel. You wouldn't know that, unfortunately.
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06-25-2007, 04:41 AM
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Originally Posted by Jolly McJollyson
The incessant wallowing in self-pity was just too much. I couldn't finish.
Would you like any cheese to go with the whine?
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It's the role of young ladies of a certain age (and boys too, let's face it) to follow this path. It worked for Slyvia Plath...
It reads like the synopsis for a chick-lit novel. Meantime girl finally finds love.
Write the novel, space-girl! |
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06-25-2007, 05:02 AM
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Originally Posted by space-dye-vest
Criticising a piece doesn't mean "be as lame and logic-less as possible, please!"
On a serious note, there was no self-pity in the piece. It was just something certain women feel. You wouldn't know that, unfortunately.
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In the meantime, do let's quote jolly mcjollyson
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Originally Posted by jolly, old boy
I'm not a writer
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In the meantime between that, at least take a look at his writings to see if his claim is of any worth, love. |
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06-25-2007, 05:41 AM
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Originally Posted by space-dye-vest
On a serious note, there was no self-pity in the piece.
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There was. Just because it's implicit rather than explicit doesn't mean it's not there. And it's not just something that only women feel; I doubt there's many guys out there who haven't been good friends with the girl they'd rather be 'more emotionally involved with'*.
* Spot the euphemism. |
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06-25-2007, 07:11 AM
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Originally Posted by Mike C
It's the role of young ladies of a certain age (and boys too, let's face it) to follow this path. It worked for Slyvia Plath...
It reads like the synopsis for a chick-lit novel. Meantime girl finally finds love.
Write the novel, space-girl!
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heh, good idea. But no, I don't think I'm good enough for that yet. |
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06-25-2007, 07:18 AM
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Originally Posted by Mike C
There was. Just because it's implicit rather than explicit doesn't mean it's not there. And it's not just something that only women feel; I doubt there's many guys out there who haven't been good friends with the girl they'd rather be 'more emotionally involved with'*.
* Spot the euphemism.
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Implicit self-pity, yeah. But I was just responding to Jolly's alleging me for being excessively cheesy. So okay, I'd rephrase myself ..
"There was no explicit self-pity to be allegedly called "cheese" or "whine" "
That might be true for guys too. But I've always come across the ones who're full of themselves, and don't admit they feel the negative emotions like, let's say, "self-pity". Oh what the heck, my general idea of guys has always been that they're jerks. (exceptions are there, so no offence meant) And yeah, it could be a misconception too. |
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06-25-2007, 07:48 AM
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Gees I love/hate when people write stories about me!
PS I want the rest of the book please, and yes you are good enough.
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Fossy's good too. She gives good advice.
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06-25-2007, 09:19 AM
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Originally Posted by space-dye-vest
heh, good idea. But no, I don't think I'm good enough for that yet.
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Maybe not. But you will be by the time you finish writing it.
And yes, guys generally like to present themselves as self-confident, and are usually jerks. But we cry too - generally just when nobody's looking. |
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06-25-2007, 01:52 PM
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Originally Posted by Fossy
Gees I love/hate when people write stories about me!
PS I want the rest of the book please, and yes you are good enough.
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Heh, thank you Fossy for the love part. Thankyou for the hate part too; keeps me going =)
And thanks for thinking I'm all right. =) |
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06-25-2007, 01:55 PM
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Originally Posted by Mike C
And yes, guys generally like to present themselves as self-confident, and are usually jerks. But we cry too - generally just when nobody's looking.
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The irony is that not many guys admit it. I appreciate that you have the heart to do so. |
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