Guilt (very short) - Page 2 - Writers Forum

Rob · 06-18-2007, 12:06 PM

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Originally Posted by Funwriter

I hate to disagree, but I believe that all stories needn't be long and totally descriptive. I think it is refreshing to have someone get to the point quick and have me on the edge for a few short, exciting moments. I am not sure I need to know everything about the character and may not even want to as long as I get it and have something to take with me after reading it (like a chill and an the hairs on my neck rising).

Sure, but my point was that although this achieves what is sets out to do at this length, there's a lot of scope for doing more with the idea.

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Originally Posted by Funwriter

I think it is much harder to write a moving short story than it is a long descriptive one. Have you tried?

I think good stories are hard to write whatever the length. I don't think this one is particularly good, but it's okay. Of course, 'long' doesn't have to mean 'descriptive' in a derogatory sense. I'm not suggesting that this simple story should be padded simply to add to the word count. Again, I think it's possible to get a lot more from the idea. The author is free to choose whether to attempt that at some point in time.

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Originally Posted by Funwriter

Have you tried?

Sure. I've written plenty of very short stories.

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Originally Posted by Funwriter

It’s odd, I was sending in work to publishers and the editors always said trim this and trim that. I started taking it as a challenge to put as much into as few words as possible. I enjoy this task, and find it quite tough to do.

Easier with practice, like everything else.

Cheers,
Rob

Voodoo · 06-18-2007, 02:50 PM

i could learn from this story, i think.

boongee · 06-19-2007, 08:21 PM

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Originally Posted by rachiesmif

Dangling a mouse roughly by it's tail

should be its

I just thought I'd point that out. I like the story, especially the last paragraph. Really short stuff like this is cool.

Skoosh · 06-20-2007, 08:59 PM

>_< AHHHH Wow, that's soooooooo sad. it's really good, it is. But SOOOOOOOO SAD!

rachiesmif · 06-21-2007, 04:38 AM

Boongee, thank you. I'll change that now. Thanks for liking my shortie story.

And you too Skoosh, I know it's sad :'(

German Voodoo, what do you think you could learn?

Rachiesmif

Voodoo · 06-21-2007, 04:40 AM

Conveying devastation without resorting to distorting the context and word flow.

rachiesmif · 06-21-2007, 04:43 AM

lol. I have to read your comments twice before my little brain can process the sentence.

Voodoo · 06-21-2007, 05:08 AM

Flash, substance.

Golden · 06-21-2007, 05:19 AM

Good work, emotive and somthing not so usual. I myself dont think it would work as well as a longer piece as what makes it work (in my humble opinion that is) is that it is to the point and all the imigary and feelings are crammed together, leaving no ramblings.

Golden

rachiesmif · 06-21-2007, 05:57 AM

Thanks Golden. I like it short too. But I might lengthen it a bit if I get bored sometime, right now I've loads of other unfinished writing to be getting on with.

Rachiesmif