[What was it? Just a second ago she had been dreaming, now she stared into the dark of her room. Wondering what the hell had woken her up. She lay still, listening to the stillness of the night
for the noise or for anyone who had awoken* her up. She just hoped it was her
parents home early from their party. Though she doubted it as the neon digits of her alarm clock glowed ten o’clock from her bedside table.
Carina was shaking now, she wasn’t easily sacred but
not knowing/the not knowing state was creeping her out. She was the only one home
and for that she felt incredibly vulnerable. Then she heard it
, something break
which sent a shiver up her spine. The noise came from down stairs. Carina was
trying to muster the courage to go and see what it was when she
heard the
pittter patter on the stairs that finished just outside her bed room. Then there was a
creak and her door that was not latched
, creaked ever so slowly open.
A shadow of something was cast across the room by the moon light that streamed through the window. Carina was shocked
; for a rabbit stood there. Carina felt at ease
because it must have gotten
through cat flap. She was about to climb out of bed to remove the
pest when it’s eyes lit up,
then hoped towards her
landing on her chest
and then did the unbelievable. It began to suck all
her life out through
the mouth
, removing her
soul and every ounce of
energy left in her. Leaving her as nothing more
than a pail faced lifeless figure.
Carina
awoke* from her dream. A little unnerved. A dream within a dream was odd
, she thought. She doubted it happened very often. Then she heard
Pitter Patter Pitter Patter coming up the stairs.]
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As you can see Taz, I took the liberty of fixing some mistakes for you, but generally the style of writing needs to be worked on.
As for the underlined Pitter Patter, which I assume is the rabbits sound climbing/walking, I would advise you to change it because it sounded like you are addressing children, and obviously you're not.
*Both verbs (awaken & woke) have approximately the same meaning (we say the children have been woken/awoken/woken up by the thunder). Awaken is more formal than the rest, and to wake is nearly always a phrasal verb, accompanied by "up" (except in the sense of keeping watch near a corpse before burial. 
) 
. Besides from the fact it could do with a proof read, the piece is quite good.
