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12-20-2005, 08:04 PM
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Chocolate: The Stuff of Life
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This little story is fluffy fun and purely self-indulgent on my part. I'm craving chocolate and that became my inspiration for this little rant. 
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What I wouldn't do for a piece of chocolate. After running a mile UPHILL on the singeing black top on the hottest day Florida has ever seen with my calves shooting pain and sweat pouring off me like a river, all I can think of is chocolate!
Diets are always hard, but this one is taking me to the edge. The edge of my sanity, that is.
I have to pick up coffee for the office (oh no, they can't just brew it their selves) and when I walk into that corner coffee shop and breathe in the sweet aroma of those HUGE buttermilk pancakes and sizzling bacon, it's all I can do to keep from licking the plates of dirty dishes that I walk by while going out the door. But I promised myself, no cheating.
OH, but what I wouldn't do for some chocolate right at this very moment! Ah, the tempting, delicious stuff of life. I saw a chocolate bar sitting innocently at the back of the fridge this morning. But now I see it glaring at me with a evil grin whispering, "Eat ME!"
I double-time it up that hill and nearly trip over the welcome mat. What's wrong with me?? Have I no self control??
I jerk open the fridge.... It's gone!
My boyfriend is standing behind me chomping wistfully away at MY chocolate bar.
"I'm only helping you baby." he says with a smile.
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12-20-2005, 08:42 PM
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 I like this! I know what you mean...I was craving chocolate for a week and I finally just gave in and bought a huge bar and ate like 10 of those mini choco bars! Just a few things that caught my eye:
'wistfully' isn't a good adjective to use here.
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After running a mile UPHILL on the singeing black top on the hottest day Florida has ever seen with my calves shooting pain and sweat pouring off me like a river, all I can think of is chocolate!
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I was gonna say that this sentence is too mega super long, but now I like it. It shows how crazy she's going for chocolate, so crazy her mind is racing! Hehe...
Nice story, something I can relate to! Thanks for the read!
LW 'preme
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12-20-2005, 09:00 PM
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chocolate
Okay, anything that has the word 'chocolate' in it's title is an automatic draw to me, so that alone made it worth the read.
"...After running a mile UPHILL on the singeing black top on the hottest day Florida ..."
what is singeing mean?
You need to get together with LoneWolf on this; the boyfriend MUST die, and she can give you some eloquent idea on how to accomplish this. Aside that, this was very gratifying.
And to the guys that will mention that chocolate is BAD for diets, they have chocolates for diets, and for other women type situations.
I'm dining on chocolate designed for those approaching that time of life when sex becomes safe (procreation wise) when ever you wanna...
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12-20-2005, 09:02 PM
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I found the most delicious chocolate today. Hershey kisses filled with cherries. Mmm, mmm, mmm!
I won't admit how many I ate...
Nae
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12-20-2005, 10:10 PM
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I eat like about a kilo of chocolate covered almonds a week. I consider them the perfect food, a perfect balance of carbs, fat and protein. A person could probably live on chocolate covered almonds... good milk chocolate though, not the cheap shit.
Nice boyfriend!
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12-21-2005, 12:34 PM
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Hey LoneWolf,
I actually have a pack of Reese's in the back of my fridge calling my name right now!... I'm about to give in.
You're right, wistfully isn't the word. I tried to think of a better one just now, but it won't come to me!
Believe me, chocolate will make you crazy!
Wyndstar,
"singeing"
It came up in my spell check as correct.
Hmm, would scorching be better?
Haha ! !
Chocolate does make you crazy...
I think I already said that,...
but it's just as true as it was a couple sentences before!
Hey, that'd make a good sig line.
Oh, Nae!
You must share some of those!
I thought they were only around on Valentine's day.
*licking lips icon* 
Hey Chris,
I could live off of chocolate covered peanuts. I get a bag at this little grocery store every chance I get. They really should be included in the Food Pyramid!
A kilo? That's a lot of chocolate!
Funny,... I read somewhere that a chemical themodine or something has the same effect as LSD on the brain's receptors. But you'd have to eat like 25 pounds to actually get high.
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12-21-2005, 02:40 PM
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You need to get together with LoneWolf on this; the boyfriend MUST die, and she can give you some eloquent idea on how to accomplish this.
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Is that my reputation now? "Call LoneWolf if someone must die: She can kill eloquently." Hmm...I kind of like that. I now claim it as my sig.
...mmm, Reese's...
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