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Short Stories Short Stories, usually between 500 and 2000 words.

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Old 10-10-2005, 11:40 AM   #1
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The Desert

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Haven't written anything in a while because I've been working on my novel

The man burst through the city gates and collapsed as the last of his strength deserted him. For a moment I was stunned, but then I came to my senses and went to close the gates before the city streets clogged with sand. I then went to help the fallen man. His clothes had obviously once been very opulent, but living in the desert had reduced them to little more than rags which clung to his gaunt frame. His once luxurious, flowing beard was now a matted, dishevelled mess which stood out in odd directions. His ribs were showing and his limbs had been atrophied by starvation and were little more than twigs. He sighed and I could tell it was his last. The Desert had chewed him up and spit him out to die.
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Old 10-10-2005, 02:00 PM   #2
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Hey Colvin,

A nice little exercise in imagery. I like short work like this because it just gives you a chance to flex your muscles a bit. I would leave this quick story with a question or problem. It would give your reader a chance to contemplate the meaning behind it all.
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It's always good to write flash. If you can say what you want to say in only a few words you're doing well. But don't forget to end with something: a twist, a point, something funny . . . anything that makes the reader glad they read the story.

Good luck with the novel
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