shadowseer

Alright, this came to me while listening to the Donnie Darko soundtrack. And it is not incoherent babbling, it is SYMBOLISM. Everything in this story represents something else. If you guys are totally clueless, I'll tell you, but otherwise you're on your own.
Sooooo, it is kinda weird. Just look at the title,

Waltz in the Fourth Dimension

Finding love isn’t the hard part. Keeping it intact, there’s the challenge.

But that’s the point, isn’t it? If you can’t keep it, then it isn’t love, is it?

But love isn’t the point. There is no love in the fourth dimension. But I will tell you what is in the fourth dimension.

Waltzing.

Waltzing in the fourth dimension. It sure as hell isn’t easy getting there, the fourth dimension I mean, but boy oh man, when you do get there, you’ll have a blast. All the fancy cigars and waltzing you could ask for. But it isn’t about the cigars.

It’s about the waltzing.

You’ll waltz until your head falls off.

It’s like drinking the sweetest of wines that’s gone sour. You walk into the ballroom, the lights are beating down on your head, you’re sweating like a pig, but your feet just keep going.

Some kind of bubbles are floating above your heads. The people in charge say that they’re the thing that keeps the fourth dimension going. They’re the most beautiful things you’ve ever seen, but you look at them, and your heart, it just breaks. You never know why, but it always does. They make noises. It’s hard to tell what they are, but if you listen real close, you can hear crying, and screaming, or sometimes, if you listen just hard enough, you’ll hear the sound of absolutely nothing.

And the music.

It’s loud and coarse and mean and it tears your soul in half, but you can still waltz to it. You can never make out the lyrics, though. It’s just a jumbled mess of angry voices yelling at you. Listening to it makes you feel guilty and low, like scum. If you don’t listen to it, all you’ll hear are the bubbles.

There’s a man who stands out.

He doesn’t ever dance. Everyone in the fourth dimension dances, waltzes to be specific, but not him. He stands in the corner in his deep crimson suit, watching us from under his sunglasses. They’re small, but somehow, when you look into his sunglasses, you wonder if they’re even sunglasses, or if they’re dark empty sockets, portals to see dark, terrible things you don’t ever want to see.

But the waltzing.

It’s like drinking the sweetest of wines that’s gone sour. You walk into the ballroom, the lights are beating down on your head, you’re sweating like a pig, but your feet just keep going. And you don’t ever stop. You keep on waltzing, down here in the fourth dimension.

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Viqto

WOW! Great symbolism. =D> I won't say I got everything, but I did understand the waltzing was actually meaningless sex. Embodiment of lust and passion. Very nicely done. And the man in the red suit? Obvious that one is.(Yoda I am! lol)

I really like how you played in the people who were fooling themselves in relationships.

I'm going to say the 'music' is the people around you who are telling you how stupid your being about having all this meaningless sex.

I especially like the last line about how, after you are used to it, you don't ever want to leave. I really like this piece Shadow, nicely done. =D>

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shadowseer

hate to break it to you but you're wrong. sorta. the fourth dimension is hell

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Pendulum

I liked it. I didn't get the symbolysm, but I got the hellish kind of dark feel. I also liked viqto took his own conclusions, as if it were almost a piece of poetry. Good job, just my cup of tea.

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Viqto

Hmmmm, interesting....still kind of works for how I saw it, but I definitely see your meaning as well. Again, well written!

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LoneWolf

Hey Shadow,

I too liked this a lot. I didn't get all of the symbolism, but I'm going to go ahead and guess that the bubbles are the spirits of people trapped in hell? Maybe not. It was an interesting piece.

Is that an unintentional pun? Since the fourth dimension is hell and you say "It sure as hell isn't easy..". Just something I caught

I liked the dark feel of it and the tone. There were a lot of different moods in the piece and I like that a lot. Overall it was really good. Nice job!

LW

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Kat

Well certainly got the man as the devil. Reminded me of some story where the devil was wearing cowboy boots and hat that were on crooked to hide the hooves and horns. Like the meaningless sex meaning better than hell, the devil tempting you to sin. Then finding the object of your temptation leaves a bitter taste in your mouth.

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shadowseer

here are all the symbolic things
the bubbles are human sorrow
the music is human anger
the guy in the suit is satan(no!)
the dancing is meaningless sex
and
the fourth dimension is hell.

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gohn67

I liked it, very interesting. Didn't get some of the symoblism either though. But now that I see what they all mean, it makes sense.

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