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08-30-2005, 01:20 PM
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The Second Coming (Microfiction)
Jesus didn’t die when they crucified Him on the golden arches. At McDonald’s. You know, the one across the street. In a coma now. His eyes are open, blinking SOS and ‘I need to die’. Nobody catches it, though; His nurse is addicted to prescription morphine and misses a lot. And nobody gets saved.
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08-30-2005, 02:52 PM
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Very clever, Strangdaze. I like it and it made me think about it after I finished it.
Sounds like the McDonalds is in a coma.
BTW, your entry for LM was awesome. |
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08-30-2005, 03:30 PM
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Thanks, G. I've been tossing the premise around for awhile now and wantd to make it into something longer, but I just said fuck it and wrote something small and (hopefully) succint. Glad it made you think, because that was the intention.
As for LM - haha, I've already conceded the fact that some people will really like what I write, but others might find it too offbeat for their tastes. I just wrote the piece because I wanted to write something but really had no direction. But thanks 
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08-30-2005, 03:54 PM
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re: jesus
Hey strangedaze,
Been a while. I like this. It's small but chewy. All you'd have to do is reformat it a little and it would look (and read) like a poem.
What's the LM gohn refers to?
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08-31-2005, 12:58 PM
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hey G,
LM's are still going to keep running after Daniela is out, right?
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08-31-2005, 03:21 PM
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story
Well, this sis soemthing new. I didn't know you could write a story this short. I definetly have time to read this sort of thing. Not bad. Not bad at all.
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08-31-2005, 03:31 PM
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LM's are still going to keep running after Daniela is out, right?
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Yeah, Pawns going to run it after he gets back, which should be in time for the next one. |
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