prince

never dared to imagine a life without her yet compelled to sense one.i sacrifice my soul, for the one i long, stood by her for years, solely to break my loyal heart.unknown is life for me, yet desire to live just for her.i know not, how selflessness occur,when your heart beats for other.bizarre it is to thing, yet it happen when we are in love.pure love is what i experienced from her,yet say,its all nonsense.dreamt all my life serving her,yet she desire some thing more. burning with anxiety every minute,yet she turned deaf ears to me.folly is what i am and what other thing of, me but no one could imagine what inside me. whatever i do or plan to do, i do it for her,just to see her happy,she was like a baby to me, though she is strong and intelligent.her worm hug gives me strength,but it,s hard to belive.sleep avoids me and food blames me,when her thoughts occupy my soul.i shall survive enduring for love.no matter come what may.my love for thee will remain eternal,becauseyou are the only i adore.

mememe

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gohn67

Hi Prince,
Since English is not your first language, this isn't too bad. I understood what you wrote. It seems more like a love letter type of thing though, not really a story. However there are many errors in this piece. Some of the phrasing is a bit off. But I admire your courage to post this and write this. Becuase if I wrote something a different language, I doubt it could have come out half as good as yours.

I'm not going to go through the errors. Not feeling too great today. Hopefully someone else will.

Here's some advice though. The start of every sentence has to be capitalized.

Example:
CORRECT.
I walked to the store.
INCORRECT
i walked to the store

CORRECT
Fishing is fun.

INCORRECT
fishing is fun.


Look forward to seeing more your writing. Good luck.

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