BrownAfro

Thanks to those who read this. I am taking it down now.

-BrownAfro

Quack Corleone

Nerdish fantasy or serious exploration of the arousing power of humiliation and sexual politics? Maybe both!

Whatever it is, it's not pornography and it's well-written and certainly has the ability to make you think. Heck, there's some pretty sordid and complex stuff going on here, beneath the light tone and the sexy descriptions of, err-- sex. Humiliation, degradation, hate, rivalry, power struggles!

You can fuck the one you hate, but can you hate the one you fuck?

In terms of a critique, I think I caught a typo somewhere (though I can't find it now), but it was obvious enough and you should be able to catch it with a quick read through. Other than that, a brisk, smart read.

Good job, BrownAfro. Keep it up. Hehe.

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BrownAfro

Thanks a lot for the critique. I can't tell you how much I appreciate it.

Peace and Respect,

BrownAfro

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Tunkpirate

I must give a whole hearted what the fuck? Taken down before I could read it...

I hate public opinion

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Crazy_dude6662

that was kinda mean, wheres the constructive critisim in that!?!

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BrownAfro

Hey guys,

I took it down because I figured if Ilyak1986 was not going to take it seriously and be close-minded about what I consider to be art then I should avoid posting this kind of stuff.

If anyone wants to read it just shoot a PM my way.

Thanks for posting and I am flattered that others would be upset that they didn't get to read it.

Peace and Respect,

BrownAfro

PS.

I don't take things that people like Ilyak1986 say to heart. Looking at the bigger picture the kid has roughly 700 posts in the same span of time that I have roughly 50. The kid is a nerd with too much to say and very little to offer.

I hope no one here takes that kid seriously, I mean... look at his signature!

So obviously we have a celebrity on our hands...



Holla.

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Tunkpirate

LOLOLOLOLOL

I dont want to start flaming here, but I have to agree.

Dude, shut the fuck up. I mean seriously, its your perogative to not like a piece, but unless you have something to say that would improve it then why not just move on.

P.S. I thought perhaps hes truly

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journyman161

Well, Ilya has had some run-ins with others, so I'll leave that subject lay.

I did read the piece before it was removed & must say, although well written, I did think it was more porn than any other genre. Given the youth of some members, it was probably a good thing to take it offline, & perhaps keep in mind we have some as young as 13 online.

I wouldn't worry about those so repressed they can cheerfully write about graphic & horrific violence but have extreme reactions to plain old sex.

As I said, I think it was well-written though circumstances meant I didn't get time to comment at the time.

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