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A crappy story wouldn't get much response, or debate, so don't worry about it. Besides, this is a wrter's forum---any sort of response is usually a good thing, even if its debatable.
I liked this story btw. The dialog is believable, and I can understand why a person would continue to live with another person despite no longer liking them. I can even get down with them being revengeful, but I think what you needed her is a bit more developement on the relationship, perhaps by making the story longer, so that the ending doesn't seem so - I think Ilan used the word - contrived. Even if the person is deranged, most readers still need a bit of build up, history, to accept the basis of such actions. You could read the story I wrote (WAY down by now) about a grandmother doing the same thing---except it was over the death of a child. I made that clear, but it still needed a longer developement.
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What will it take to show you that it's not the life it seems? I told you time and time again, you sing the words but don't know what it means
