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Old 08-25-2004, 05:50 AM   #1
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Untitled-London Bridge

I hide.

The carpet is scratchy. I ignore my goosebumps. There is black against my brain, and I dive into the emptiness.

I lie on the floor and push myself up. I am the London Bridge, and I am falling down. Ashes in my mouth.

My sister is in the other room and I cannot go see her.

I push myself up. I fall down. I arch my back and concentrate on the saltiness in my mouth and the rug burns on my elbows.

When my hands are free I rub the burns and lower my head.

My sister wants in but she cannot come. I see them talking to her in the other room and my elbows burn. I cough and spit, and crane my neck to see my pretty sisters curly top. I see her ribbons through the window.

She cannot see me. I am invisible.

I do not exist, and I am hot, sweaty, and I am London Bridge.

I have fallen down.
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Old 08-25-2004, 06:56 PM   #2
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interesting. I like how you put yourself in the shoes(or rug burned elbows?) of a imaginative child. I'm just a little confused as to who are the 'them ' in the line
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I see them talking to her
are they the parents of this invisible, fallen 'bridge'?
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