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“…haan?”. And she again heard someone calling her name “Ria…”. But as always there was noone. She shrugged her shoulders. And questioned to herself Am I going insane? And in reply she just heard an echo of her own sigh. Earlier she used to think that if you hear an invisible voice calling your name… probably someone is missing you. But later she understood it as her own soul wants someone to call her name. But now such an illusion, like hearing her name in solitude is followed by nothing more than a shrugging of shoulders and then a sigh.
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“…Haan?”.< (Capital H and No period)
"Ria," the voice called again.
Ria scanned the room again and asked, "Haan, is that you?"
No answer. Nothing but silence. She felt a cold chill shimmy through her body, raising bumps across the surface of her skin.
"Am I going insane?" she asked, her voice echoing off the walls. She let out a heavy sigh and reached for her diary. A friend had told her once that 'if you hear a voice but there is noone around, that means someone misses you.' She wrote down the date and time of the voice, noting the conditions of the weather as well. Perhaps it really was someone that missed her, perhaps it was nothing more than an over-tired mind playing tricks, perhaps she was ... Nah! She dared not think of that possibility.
~~[Prini, you need alot of work on your story telling- You have the basics, but it comes out flat because of how you word things. Look up on the internet about "Show don't Tell" to find some real good advice about writing, it will help your style tremendously- Please don't get discouraged, you have a good imagination, you just need to develope your grammar and character development skills better. Read lots of books and note how the writers form their scenes and note the words they use.]~~
Might just be me, but that didn't make much sense... 
