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Old 01-13-2004, 12:37 PM   #1
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Biomechanoid

My first post. Oh, well here goes nothing. I'm not english speaking, so please forgive any minor mistakes. Any comment is appriciated. Enjoy my short storie.

Biomechanoid
Squadron of death is send to infiltrate the alien world. Biomechanoid is marching through the city of the damned, his multi phased array radar scannes the surroundings searching for evil. Biomechanoid activates his energy armor and sends digital commands to program his battle computer. ‘Simulate interception vectors, randomize shield harmonics, enter the planetary war, computerize’. The dark alien city must be destroyed.

Thousands of aliens are marching up through the ruins of the city, their dark prophets at side. They are the seeds of darkness, the bearers of evil. Here there is no salvation, and biomechanoid blood is their wine. The dark prophets evoke their powers causing acid rain pour down, energetic armor flickers as lightning in the night.

Aliens attack! Macro bombs fall like snow from the sky, calling chaos on the ground, pain results come in screams. Fire and biogas rage through the ruins, aliens sift from all directions their vicious tentacles snatching for biomechanical parts. Streaks of missile exhaust fumes and enemy positions are projected on the vizor equipment of Biomechanoid.

Squadron of death takes position. Biomechanoid is killing all in his way, like sheep and like cattle. Sparing not his gauss cannon, sparing not his missiles. He causes carnage and horror among his ememies by crushing bone and skull. Biomechanoid activates his laser beam ripping the flesh, burning through armor and bone severing limb from limb.

Counter attack vectors and projectile simulations are calculated by Biomechanoids tactical systems. ‘Targets are selected, armor piercing armory is deployed.’ Combat sentinels launch from the biomechanic suite, spitting out chemical submunitions while they accelerate towards the alien ranks.

Electronics and blood lie on the ground, rotten limbs lie dead. Biomechanic parts fly through the air as the alien horde crashes into the squadron’s flank. Electronics warfare shells fall to the ground, combat sentinels switch into defensive mode to counter atttack. Exploding missiles light up the battle field, revealing horror and death. Biomechanoid checks his armor, he has to stand and fight while systems running low. Battle computer traces everything that moves, selecting interception solutions to engage multiple threads.

Biomeachanoid notices unknown weapons piercing his mobilium shell, medpacks activate and send anaesthetics to the gaping wound at his side. The battle suit fires the last clip of submunitions to counter. Another hit clashes through his chest. Here there is no salvation, and the only way out for Biomechanoid is piece by piece, trasistor by transistor. The battle computer spits out the last command. ‘Game over, please insert coin to continue.’

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"Here there is no salvation, and biomechanoid blood is their wine."
Like this line

I didn't like having to keep reading 'biomechanoid' though, but it all became clear at the ending - nice way to finish it off.

Have to be careful not to over-use the technology aspect, as if you use too much in future pieces some readers may get swamped.

Keep up the good work
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