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I particularly liked your description of Neil. It was a well formed characterisation. Your prose is interesting. I like the way things are described so straightforwardly. There's not much messing about and it makes the environments and people see more real, which I think is crucial to writing.
I'm guessing you pressed "Post" rather than "Reply"....
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Please, Please forgive me,
But I won't be home again.
Maybe someday you'll look up,
And barely conscious you'll say to no one;
"Isn't something missing?"