amie

I'm terribly sorry if I came across as "demanding" a revision. I meant nothing of the sort. I simply wanted to give my thoughts on the story and then clarify my final point as is the nature of this forum. Whether or not a revision takes place is obviously entirely up to the author.

I thought the piece was really very good, and I wanted to honor that with a response to it.

- amie -

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Alagomeji

Hey... how did it get published? and how much were you paid? All out of curiousity.

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gohn67

I'm pretty sure you're not around anymore, but awesome story. Though I did not particularly like the ending. But that's very minor when compared to the rest of the piece.

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