Thread: The Secret War Project

This is a project which I am currently working on on a part time basis, so it only progresses up to 7 episodes.

It is set in a modern/fantasy/action/adventure/anime/horror style genre which is going to be very fast pace with very little dialogue in between, or at least I am trying to make it that way.

It is going to be animated by a friend of mine who goes by the name of Studionightbird who posts quite a bit on newsgrounds. While on the other hand my script is going to be displayed both here and at my project website which will be posted at a later date because the forum won't let me post any link yet.

Secret War

Ep. 1 - Intro

[Black Screen]

"A long time ago a war was wage between the force of light and the force of darkness, neither was the force of light good nor the darkness bad but they were seen as such by humanity. The war grew long and tedious and eventually a new force came into being seen as the Judges by Darkness and the Outcast by the Light but to themselves they were the Nameless"

[Start with the sound of train and an image starts to form of a (presumed) man riding on a train, they wear an over coat, the door open (with door sliding sound) and another figure enter, he wears an overcoat and a broad brimmed hat]

[The stranger approaches the other figure and the eyes underneath the hat began to glow a yellowish glow]

[train sounds continues in the background]

[a low growl comes from the stranger, its figure began to blur and launches itself at the other figure, claws slit out from the right sleeves and lashes out at the other]

[the other stand at ready]

[darkness]

[train sounds continue and screeching noise and metal breaking and ripping with growling noise]

[darkness and silence]

[new scene]

"The war still continue on today some of the time in broad daylight..."

[Large man in overcoat wielding a hammer and throws it at a shapeshifting monster with many people scurrying, screaming and running out of the way...hearing a crunching sound before the intro continues]

"But mostly it happens under the cover of darkness..."

[Its raining heavily and a figure walks through it, change to the figure's points of view to see another figure, the first figure start to rush at him, switches scene again to a mist covered area, and glowing and the mist start to explode outward, with a shadowy figure jumping outward with a presumed blade in each hand"

"This is a war that happens everyday that hardly anyone knows about...this is the Secret War"

[Switch back to the train scene, the first person is now seen flying backward and landing on the ball of their feet, their face and much of their bodies can't be seen but out of their hands comes a glowing energy blade, the shapeshifter continues its barage roaring as it comes forward]

[Switch scene again to see a large greyish blurry figure barreling toward the side of the moving train...it barely hits the train]

[Quickly switch to inside of train with it suddenly lurching and rolling from one side to the other causing utter chaos to the inside, metal creaks and rips apart, people scream and get toss about]

[Darkness with continuous screaming, and metal breaking and crashing noises and then finally silence with some sound of a few metal still rolling about]

Ep. 2 - Friend/Foe

[Hard rock theme song]

[handsome guy standing on cliff face looking across the ocean....goes to across the ocean...another man standing with most of his face covered but a hand is seen with a semi visible tattoo of a snakes head on his hand with swirling dark clouds gathering around and above him]

[switch to next scene]

[Man in black overcoat and sunglasses, jumping and kicking at hidden shadows, a shadowy figure swipe away his glasses and his eyes are glowing red]

[Switch scene]

[Man with short brown hair standing on top of building bursts into dark/white flame and jumps downward tumbling and rolling as he lands on the ground with many rushing at him from all sides and the same dark white fire burst outward in rings incinerating and burning anything it touches to a crisp or dust blown in the wind]

[Switch scene]

[A white blur sped across the screen, diagonally upward from right to left, camera zoom to catch up to blur and can see its a beautiful woman with gold and black hair in white chinese costume with glowing energy blade coming out of both of her hands]

[Darkness with only sounds of heavy breathing, camera angles upward, darkness is discovered only to be the dark concrete floor, camera slowly angles upward to show the very same beautiful woman that was seen before in the intro breathing heavily leaning on a brick wall, the woman is bleeding from her side]

[Camera turn to the right side of the screen to show a road leading up to the wall, it angles upward to show a building, and on top of that building the werewolf crouching on the roof of the building and scanning and sniffing the area, he launches himself upward as he jumps across the other building, he overshadow a full moon with him shade totally in black]

[The woman clasp her side and run to the left, the scene shift to her point of view as she runs, her vision is blurring from loss of blood, she seem to have reach her destination but was suddenly stopped by a figure cloak in darkness, she backs away suddenly only to run back into the werewolf who growls, blood loss got to her and she fell backward]

[Darkness]

[a new scene]

[it is an image of a ceiling with cracks and spiderweb running across it and a lightbulb that works but hardly]

"You got quite a figure there...pity you are way...too young for me"

[startle the woman look to where the voice is and at the same time as if realizing something she reaches under the blanket she was wrapped in and feel around]

"Yup you are naked as a baby's bottom"

[the man says while blowing out rings of smoke from his cigar]

"Quite hard to patch you up to at that"

[As if in resignation she jumps up from the bed suddenly energy blades appear from her hand and start making her way carefully up to the man]

"Whoah there is that anyway to treat your savior?"

[The man continue to blow smokes completely relax]

[The woman silent rushes up to him and was suddenly thrown back by a shockwave, a wall of air that bounces her back from where she came]

[The woman speaks]

"You are...TRAITOR!!!!"

[The man can be seen smiling in the shadow]

"Now, now you shouldn't be calling names upon first meeting"

[The man continues]

"Besides it was your little fight that had me most concern, my poor little grandson was in that train that you smashed up, and I haven't seen him in ages, maybe an apology is better than name calling hmmmm..."

[The woman glares at him]

[All of a sudden howls can be heard, getting louder and louder as if getting closer and closer]

"I thought you took care of him"

[The man frown standing up slowly]

"I did, I doubt anything can survive without a head"

[The air on the wall on the woman's side start to warp]

[The woman quickly turns back to confront the wall grimacing holding her twin energy blades up]

[A reddish scaly snout appears to where the woman's head had been if not for the action of the other man who suddenly sped up to where she was pull her to the side]

[The dogs appear, three of them maybe even more coming through the portal]

"Hell-hounds...."

[The man growl and sends a blast of air toward the hounds pushing them back against the wall but it did not hurt them for they went straight through the wall]

"Quickly..."

[The man grab a hold of her bodily and blast one of the walls open with his power and launches himself through the hole and using the power once again use it to cushion both their falls]

[Howling noises]

"Shit"

[The woman grumph trying to struggle]

[The man suddenly ran at an inhuman speed but the hounds can be heard as if catching up]

[darkness]

[Closing theme]

[A man is seen with his back turn toward the screen with black white flame burning through and around him in rings of flame]

[the man is seen walking away and then running]

[he pasts several people, first the woman with the psychic blade, then the man with red eyes, then the man with the cigar, at this point in time he could be seen to be almost flying]

[He takes off the ground flying past the exploding lights and into the ever growing darkness as if confronting it]

[Explosion - follows by nothingness and then images of broken buildings and cascading dead bodies and at the same time people cheering]

Ep. 3 - After the accident

[Opening Theme]

[Starts off at the wreckage of train seen from the inside, camera zoom in to a body of a man lying amongst the wreckage, a leg of another person can be seen, and an arm reaching outward but stuck in that pose]

[The man's face can not be discern for the mop of dark hair had cascade on top of most of it]

[Enters his thoughts - zoom into and inside of his head]

'You know they say that at the moment of your death, all of your life passes before your very eyes, for me nothing like that happen, all I saw was people falling everywhere cascading their bodies about and against the sides or ceiling of the train as it roll'

[Pictures form of the events as he thinks this]

'People screaming and blood spurting as metal poles or shrapnels enters their bodies, lights vanishing from their eyes as they fell, the man that I had sat next with had broken his neck upon impact, the mother holding her baby in her arm to shield them from harm had in the end kill her own baby by crushing it under her weight when she was flung about, she still lives, still crying, not wanting to live but unable to die, she might go mad...but all I am doing is staring at the ceiling or is that the floor or could it just be the side I do not know, everything was so twisted it was all hard to discern'

[Images of all of these form as he thinks this]

'I can smell burning, it is not something you want to smell when you are lying amongst the dead in a twisted wreckage barely able to move, I don't want to die'

[the man pulls himself up to his knee at this and groan, he is bleeding from head to foot the effort making him shake]

[After several tries and several stumble he manages to get on to his feet]

'that burning smells is coming from the right, probably the train operator's room'

[he looks at the crying woman clearly going mad, sighs and reaches for her, she continue crying, and pushes him away]

[he manages to grip her wrist and finally manages to drag her to her feet but she continues to struggle looking back at the baby and crying]

"he's dead" [says the man] "We have to get out of here"

[the screen zooms out to show the two figures standing one gripping the wrist of the other, blood can be seen dripping from all sides of the train and then zooms out even more to see the entire wreckage all twisted like a broken snake, the platform on the left look completely ruined, some bodies can be seen in the rubble]

[screen goes back to the man]

[the man slaps the woman hard, again and again] "snaps out of it" [the woman finally seems to understand, and she let him drag her off]

[The screen then shows the man with the woman being dragged along, each carriage they find someone still alive, an old lady, a blind man, a young boy, a train conductor, each bloodied and with their own injury either mentally or physically or both]

[the scene zooms out and go bird's eye view, a group of people can now be seen leaving the train through the back door]

[sparks flies and the train wreckage starts to burn, some explosions in the tanks of the train]

[The camera zooms in on the man once again, he slides his fingers through his hair, and his face is finally seen, a tall handsome black hair man bloodied from head to toe, breathing heavily from the exertion]

[He turns seemingly toward the camera but really at the now burning wreckage]

[Closing theme - difference is the man that was burning in black white flame now has his face turn slightly to the side, it is the man that survives the train accident and able to save a few people]

Ok thats 3 of 6 episodes I have written up so far, if you like them I might post some more up cos I am really lazy.

I see a lot of viewing but no comments or critiques, any comments would be appreciated.

Because nobody knows what the hell it is.

It talks about cameras and stuff, but has no dialog tags or format or anything. If it's for a comic book, fine, but it's not anything like a script.

And if it was all that voice over and THOUGHTS!!!!! are just too weird to comment on. (How are you going to show thoughts?)

You need to figure out what you are trying to do, then learn how to do it. Otherwise this is little more than a dorm rap about "this cool idea I had".