Thread: Movie idea, already written out

I've already got the script all written out, it's not very great, no real details just the basics of what the people actually say.

I've rewritten it and this is the main plot line,

It takes place right after the American Revolution, and it takes a whole different stance on how history would play out. Some might not like it because of how it plays out, but hear me out first.

So there is a council in which is deciding how America is being formed, government-wise and leader-wise, and they're rigging it all to be set up for America to start off. Believe it or not these are the good guys. The antagonist is a man by the name of James, in whom tries to gather a large following in America to take over the thirteen newly formed colonies. The main character, Mark, goes throughout the story at first hating the council because he felt America should be a true Democracy and that the president should be voted in, but then later, all of a sudden he has a change of heart and agrees that America should be first set on the right foot by the council's help.

Later in the movie, at the very end, you find out this sudden change of heart was because he had ended up joining James(who was very, very persuasive, I don't know how to describe him really, I suppose you could describe him as a man who always knows what you want to hear, and then he uses it to his advantage), and James used him to get to the council and remove them to take over.

Unlike with a happy ending, it would have a really twisted ending.

It's really still a work in progress and I didn't explain it perfectly, but that's really the main gist of it.

Any critique and advice would be nice, thnx!

Oh yeah, I forgot to mention the name, I definitely decided on the name, Of Politics and War

sounds good, I like the title.

Can't wait to hear more - 'goes about the story' kind of skips some of the plot, but I'm definitely liking this!

Just a problem with the context, though. The thirteen colonies had no central/Federal government that could be "taken over." The American Republic was a Confederacy until 1789, precisely to avoid the very scenario you're painting. Maybe fast-forward the time to that year - 1789 - with the new Federal Constitution and Chief Executive pending, with these "good guys" plotting to make George Wasgington the American dictator.

It sounds a little dull if i'm honest. It's something that obviously comes down to personal prefferance. But it just doesnt sound like much will happen. Is there anything involved in it like a romance or something?

And action, don't forget.

Guys like Bud Wiser give us credibility. On the other hand I would have never known about the Confederacy issue. I see lots of opportunities for Mata Hari types, seductions (James providing Mark a nudge over to his side through sex), and black mail (romance), assassination attempts (failed and successful), violent clashes between factions. I think it's a good idea with a lot of potential.

I'd just be careful if you're gonna flip the protag at the end he stills needs something in the way of him achieving his goal and it's not a character I would want to see introduced at the very last minute. That would feel forced. Does that make sense?

HTH,
LC