Thread: Opinions on logline please.

In the late Twenty First Century, when a member of a closed religious community’s persistent dreams lead him and his family on a perilous journey deep into the mysterious world of an ancient and secretive culture, a disturbing prophecy is revealed that shakes his lifelong beliefs and speaks of a coming global “cleansing”.

I don't suppose you could make a post to perhaps, expand a bit on your vote? I suppose since this site is about as active as a 90 year old man's bowels, I'm asking too much.

You could trim it down a lot (take a look at what the first "when" does for you) but you still end up with a setup rather than a story. For your faceless character.

What is his problem? is part of your problem