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Buzz · 08-15-2006, 11:33 PM

INT. VEGAS CASINO -- EVENING

In a highstakes game of blackjack, Moses doubles down unexpectedly.

MOSES
I feel lucky this time. I think I'll double down baby.

DEALER
Are you stupid, I have a 20. A freagin 20 man.

CARD PLAYER 1
Dude!! He's got a 20! You'll have to get a 21 to beat him.
This isn't a good time to press your luck.
He's going to wipe you off the map.

CARD PLAYER 2
No way. No f'ing way. I can't watch this.

CARD PLAYER 3
Yo mon. It's a 20 be on the board. The cawds don't lie!

Moses hesitates for a second. Takes a deep breathe. Looks around. Takes a sip of his drink, ah...so refreshing, then taps for the additional card landing a 21!!!

DEALER
Jesus Christ man. You lucky SOB.
Hold on let me reshuffle real quick.

MOSES
As long as I can keep splitting the deck.

CUT TO:

Jesus at the poker table.

ernieweaselfat · 08-16-2006, 02:51 PM

It's a bit on the cliched side...

It sounds like the start of a bad joke. "Jesus, Moses and a jamaican guy are playing cards..." All you're missing is the rabbi.

I have never been a fan of a person from one country writing another person's accent. You have to be a damn good writer to make it so it doesn't sound racist.