Thread: Evolve a sentence

This is a short description exercise i use now and then to make my brain think descriptively. Basically, what you do is transform a boring sentence into an imaginative and descriptive one. For example,

The man walked into a shop.

WOULD BECOME:

The well dressed man, who was casually wearing tight fitted jeans and heavily polished shoes, strode through the door of the shop. As he walked, the heels on his shoes gently clapped against the shiny surface of the shop floor. As he entered the room, everyone gazed at him and the dazzling auror he seemed to be giving off.

Now try evolving this sentence:


The children were playing football in the park.








Now this exercise may or may not have been done before and it may work for others and not some. But i just thought it would be nice showing people what keeps my brain in shape...

The children were playing football in the park.:

A beautifully ornamented patch of the field, was live and buzzing with the sense of carefreeness and summer joy. The kind when endless afternoons and exploring the nearby canyons are the most stimulating things in the world.
On this particular summery day, a group of no more than 15 hand picked neighborhood rugrats were toe to toe with each other for a very serious prize. Winning today would mean control of the field. Every toss of the football downfield could mean life or death for the field's young inhabitants.

Next sentence: A young girl boards a bus.

Her hair fell into her eyes as she squinted in the harsh sunlight that first day of school. She brushed the blonde lock out of her face softly, smiling absently as she thought of Timothy. Her bus finally pulled up, and she stepped on to it awkwardly, looking for him. He'd said he'd be there. 3rd seat on the left, smiling absently, thinking of her..


next sentence:

A dog buries a bone.

Well now, there goes that pesky little dog, the one the other kids that lived down the street always had to tease for some reason or another. It was such a pathetic little mongrel, walking with it's head bent low, and it's tail between it's legs. In it's jaws was a large, dirty old bone, which the dog carried over to the nearest tree in the nearest garden to give it it's own special funeral.

Next Sentence:

The man changed the channel.

His wife was in the kitchen preparing dinner. The familiar aromas of barbecue ribs wafted into the room and he breathed deeply. He could hear plates being lifted and her footsteps approaching. The signature tune on the television sounded loudly. It was one of those programmes. One of HER programmes. One of those that gave her ideas to change the home. Ideas that made his free time and cash evaporate. He quickly grabbed the remote and changed the channel, but unfortunately it was too late, she was already there.


Next sentence : The train pulled into the station.

Wheezing its final puffs of smoke, the panting locomotive drew to a halt, ending its sprint in a last whistle of steam before shutting off its engine.

Next Sentence:

The cat meowed.

To the humans the sound they heard was a meow, but to Fluffy the cat it was her objection to the name they had bestowed upon her. Didn't they have any imagination....Fluffy of all things.....MEOW!

Next sentence: She answered the telephone

At last, the call. Matilda blinked at the loud screaming of the telephone and wished she could be a different person. She cared for him so much. But he was in Iraq. She told him it was too bold of him to stay another term, but her did. Now Matilda was the coward. She reached for the phone with a quick, delicate hand. "hello?"

"yes, Mrs. Robinson?"

"Um, yes?"

"I have unfortunate news..."



next sentence: someone robbed someone.