Thread: Group Story?

The main story will be the "quest" to find the boy. The war and the backsoty will be the first part.

The thing with the demons is that it's not a slow, insidious invasion; it's a full-scale war. There's the army and everyone involved in this. The demons neither need nor want to walk the streets undetected. It's perfectly plausible that they can, but they just wouldn't, most of the time. They prefer to cause terror.

Also, where would their "base" be? They came out of another dimension, through Pandora's Box. They don't want to go back there. They've been released on reality, and they want to have some fun (which, for them, means killing everything they come across, naturally). I don't see tham as an organised army, but rather as an unruly horde, held together by the massive will of their leader. They get power (from "eating" people, for want of a better expression) as often as they can, and only for their own advancement. Life in purgatory has created a "survival of the strongest" attaitude amongst them. More power means they are higher in the hierarchy.

if the demons 'command' is based on power why not have them like vampires in nature, they feed to gain strength, but those that they feed on become 'infected' and in turn become lesser demons, further fueling war and the demons apocaliptic (if thats spelt right) plans

Possibly, but the feeding includes the death of the victim. They "feed" on the life energies of their victims, draining them completely in an instant. One touch and Bam! Dead.

Although I suppose it could be possible for the demons to regulate how much they take. In that case, the victim could very well turn into a kind of hybrid human/demon thing. Although that would go against the whole ethos of the demons (they would be losing some of their own power and giving it to another, in essence).

It would allow for a character with ties to the demons, though. If there was a hybrid stong enough to throw off the influence of their demon side... Hmmm...

And maybe these hybrids could be created intentionally, and used as cannon fodder in assaults. It's the sort of thing I can imagine the demons doing, as the hybrids aren't true demons, and are good only for using up as many bullets as possible beore they die.

Maybe that happens when the demons kill in their "human" forms.

or what if wene the demons feed they pass on a virus that starts to change the victem, but a few people are immune to it, creating your human/demon hybrids, they get the extra demonic powers, but none of the evil ' i wana eat small children' urges

i love 'or what if'

Yeah, but there's the whole "death from the feeding" side of things...

I'll elaborate on what I said, because it's pretty similar to what you just posted.

When the demons feed in their "natural" forms, the feeding is accompanied by instant death for the victim, along with their soul being sucked out and devoured.

When they feed in their "human" form, however, the victim does not die. They have most of their higher mental function erased, and the corruption of the demon is passed into their bodies. The corruption slowly takes control, turning them into a beast-like demon/human hybrid, with the power of a lesser demon, but no higher consciousness to speak of. They just roam around in packs, killing whatever life they see.

There will be a few strong-willed people who can manage to resist this process, though. These people can sometimes master the corruption, and retain their intelligence, even as their bodies are twisted. They would be powerful allies for humanity, as they have personal knowledge of the demons' power, but they are always killed on sight, as they appear similar to all the other hybrids out there.

I don’t know if it’s a good idea to use hybrids or not, all up to you lot on that one and I’ll be happy with whatever you chose.

A quest to find the boy sounds good. Do you think the demons would be smart enough to find the boy themselves and try to destroy him?, if they are it would add an extra problem to overcome.

Ok I’ve got an idea just to give us a better idea of the story, why don’t all of us working on this write a brief summery of the story. You know like the bit on the back cover of a book, (think its called a blurb) Then we can see if were all on the same wavelength? (for names just put anything for now)

sounds twisted and nasty, sounds good have you put any thought to there being a rallying point for the humans, like an old wise magician (no conection to lord of the rings or sword of shannara) or a young charismatic priest trying to save the boy, fighting of demons with only his faith in the light, a battered holy book and a long forgotten holy relic

for every baddie you need a goodie

Fair enough. I like the hybrid idea, and I'm sure the higher demons would be plenty smart enough to want to kill the boy, once they learn of him.

Got to go now. It'll be a couple of hours before I'm back on. How about we all get a blurb done, and we'll go over them when everyone's done and back on?

EDIT: Sam, there's the band of characters we're writing about. Sdavis has a wise old man, for one.

Demons need a leader, their leader need a way of finding out first off that there is a boy, and that the good guys are looking for him. So he has to be smart and strategic enough to know he need to stop the goodies before they can reach the boy and also try to capture the boy himself at the same time. I would think an easy way to do this would be to have the goodies lose one in battle, but him not be killed and instead taken to the Demon King and tortured for information.

I have a twist on the demon power ideas I have seen thrown around a bit. Why not have the demon able to possess people, which would severe their souls from their body. The hollow shell of the person would be able to be controlled by the demon and every demon could control so many persons at once. It would give the demons enough of an army and lots of grunts for the goodies to slaughter. Plus than the idea of the boy who can possess a demon and severe his soul seems like the ultimate payback.

Rising darkness
Evil incarnate
Hordes of hell spawn thirsty for human blood
A boy stands in the way of life, and eternal hell…………
………..with the help of his friends
Mankind on a voyage of discovery found the box, with it they found there down fall,
Follow our hero on a quest to save the remnants of mankind, to stop the onslaught,

to prevent the extinction of a race

ok im sighning of for the day, hope you like the blurb thingy, if you want to keep me in the loop feel free to pm me

In the year 2130, when the worlds energy problem is becoming a serious issue, a mission into space appears to have uncovered a solution to the problem. A small box apparently containing enough energy to run the whole world is found and brought back to earth. But all is not what it seems, after the box is pronounced indestructible it is suddenly taken and a great evil is set upon the world in the shape of demons. Now only one thing stands in their way. A boy born without a soul is the only one who can stop them from destroying the earth. A team assemble to seek out the boy but will the demons reach him first?

Wait that last post was way too long for a blurb, how about this:

2130 and demons wander the once peaceful earth in search of human flesh, only one boy can stop them, “hero” and his newly formed friends must find the boy before the demons do or all of earth will be destroyed.

Blurbs can be plenty longer than that. How about this:

The year is 2130. The world trembles under an onslaught from beyond the gates of hell. An artefact known as Pandora’s Box has been discovered in the far reaches of the solar system, and from it pour a horde of screaming, seemingly invincible demons. Society, unused to violence of any kind, struggles to adapt to a world under assault, and it will not be long before all is lost and the demons destroy everything. Packs of demons already run loose over the barren corpse of America.

Lucius Arch, however, knows that all is not lost. Pandora’s Box can be resealed, using the power of the demons themselves. He plans, along with the help of <<insert other characters here>>, to bind the demons’ leader, Azazael, into a human body, that of a prophesied child, a boy with no soul for the demon to control, and to use the demon’s power to bind the horde back within the box.

The demons, naturally, do not want this to happen, and will stop at nothing to kill the boy before Azazael can reach him. In a race against time, and the encroaching victory of the demon horde, the unlikely holders of mankind’s salvation must battle through a hostile world to carry out their daring plan.


There we go.


Sdavis, I like the idea. It would be good, but we need to decide on a small(ish) set of abilities for them, or it will all get too complicated. I personally prefer the hybrid idea, but we'll see what everyone else thinks. Although the demons could make "changes" to their possessed human thralls. That'd combine both ideas.

I had Ashe, Dom, Jenna, and Ben picked out to help, though Ben could be the boy. Ashe and Dom are brothers and more like bounty hunters and Jenna is a master of martial arts so she only uses her hands. Arch or Archanius as his full name was is a man who discovered how to use "magic" and such in the ruins of Area 51, as well some semi modern technology.