Thread: Group Story?

Just throwing this one out there, what if at the beginning the demons don’t have bodies or anything, (sort of invisible) they draw their power from the darkness and become a shadowy type form. This way it would explain the fact that their stronger in the night and their power could be drawing in the darkness/shadows and harnessing it to somehow become stronger and gain powers. Maybe as Nefieslab said mind control, but we might need to work something out there.

Great idea, take away the celebrity factor as its mostly people being worshiped for acting or singing, now they’d be treated the same as a guy working in the chippie!

I think the leader should live in the darkest place in the future, possibly underground?

Characters: Okay so about six main characters to work with altogether then, no more or it could get confusing.

The quest to find the demon leader, is that the main story or is it mostly about the war?

Like the holographic telephone idea, when a demon kills a human in his house they can see it happen but can do nothing about it!

Why not get rid of money altogether and people rely on the good nature of others for things they need with isn’t a lot.

Ground transport, how about some kind of new animal/creature that’s evolved over the years and is perfect for ground transport?

Lots and lots of people die ay, well this books sounding better by the second, but what about main characters, I think at least one of them if not more should be killed off.

Don't think of a scroll as a hard written notes/letter on parchment, think of it as a page missing for a book, having rolled itself up over the years.

Someone else said post-apocalyptic earth whereas others are thinking another planet. We need to nail this down. I still vote for Earth because you won't have to mention how so many people go to and survived on another planet.

I like the demon angle but I we need to define them a bit more clearly. I like the quest for the soul less kid who will let the demon leader possess him. Thats an interesting twist.

What's the but... for rahvin? Anything you want to say about my idea? Of and i agree about the characters but one of them might have ties to the demons. It gives it a 3d effect because one person knows what's going on in the demonic army. If we choose to expand on this character idea i think it would be good if he/she were either born with a human mother and a demon father (rape) or raised by the demons from birth. Just an idea i've been toying with.

Originally Posted by Nefieslab

What's the but... for rahvin? Anything you want to say about my idea? Of and i agree about the characters but one of them might have ties to the demons. It gives it a 3d effect because one person knows what's going on in the demonic army. If we choose to expand on this character idea i think it would be good if he/she were either born with a human mother and a demon father (rape) or raised by the demons from birth. Just an idea i've been toying with.

The thing is we wanted the story to start when the box gets found on some other planet and the demons are released, so we couldn’t have the person born and grow up, would take to long and all the humans would be dead, also if raised from birth the same problem, but still going with your idea about someone having ties to the demons, how about this:
The person or people who manage to open the box get hit with a blast when it opens sending part demon qualities into them?

Mind if I jump in, it sounded sort of interesting to me. Thought I might lend a creative hand, plus it could kick-start my own novel and get me into the swing of things lol. So I’ll share my thoughts on the demons, which I thought about a lot really.

Demons are natural born darkness, as stated by Rahvin, but them being shadow is to used. Everyone has used shadow demons, or every book I’ve read with them in it. What if they were more like blank slates, mannequins? Without face, just a pale body, wrapped in some kind of sinister darkness? That’s kind of creepy, and they just can’t walk around like that, can they? No. So I thought about what if the demons looked that way to each other, and certain people, maybe the main character[?]. Then again, when they find prey it changes. The prey sees someone they want to see, husbands, wives, kids, dead loved ones, someone they also desire to see inside. Then when the demons get them alone, they suck out their souls. Which sort of goes a long with the demon concept.

Demons are satan’s play thing, and he wants people’s souls to basically take over. Blah, blah, blah. I don’t know, thought I’d help a little if you all didn’t mind. My suggestions are just that, but I’d love to help with the rpg/novel thingy.
xoxo, Hexx.

First of all, good idea, but can you make your text bigger next time, I cant read small text easily?

Only problem I can see is when your describing them as pale bodies wrapped in darkness and the whole sucking out souls thing, all I can think of is the dementors from Harry Potter. Maybe its just me.

Also can you give some more ideas, I like the fact that the pray are drawn in by their loved ones and then get killed. What other ideas do you have?

Okay, lots of posts while I've ben away.

Firstly, the setting: It's earth, in 2130. ot some other planet. I thought that was established all along, but apparently not...

The demons: Some interesting ideas there. I just can't help thinking that an invasion of dopplegangers wouldn't be that immediately terrifying. Once people worked out what was happening, yes, but there wouldn't be the shock factor. Although...

What if the demons were (in their "natural" forms) just pure darkness. They have no set form, but can change at will. They possess the ability to literally suck the life and soul from anything they touch. This is different from the dementors, in that the soul-sucking occurs instantly and on touch, as does the killing. There is no feeling of dread (except for the natural feeling you get when confronted with a demon hell-bent on your death), or draining of warmth, just death. They are able to form their "bodies" into the shape of anything they have killed.

Much as we prefer the meat of animals who have not died in terror, the demons prefer the life energies and soul of people who have died in abject horror. It makes them "taste" better. For this reason, the like to take the shape of their victim's loved ones as they kill them, reverting to their natural forms only upon the moment of death, savouring the shock and terror coursing through the body of their newest victim.


And of course you can join in, Hexx.

I'll ask this question again now youre back:
The quest to find the demon leader, is that the main story or is it mostly about the war?

Thanks, guys. I know the idea seems a little used too, I was throwing around thing. I think it would be interesting if the demons used a base to suck out souls, and didn't do it like randomly on the steet. You know like HQ? lol. And because they change into people others know they'll follow, it's like they're in a trance.

Yea great ideas
Also they can now walk the streets with no one suspecting a thing.
Only problem is it might be too good a cover
How can you break out of the trance?

Only really strong minded people can break it, when they know it isn't someone they know. Like a glimmer in their eyes, some kind of tone in their voice, or an action. Something a loved one wouldn't do.

Cool, this way the only people that break out of it (main characters) can come together to try and destroy the demons.
That’s how the main characters meet and from there the story can get going!

Awesome. Glad I could help!

just a suggestion guys, if demons and mars are going to be strong points in your story and the demons strength is an issue why not try 'and as the heavanly body mars moves through the houses of the zodiac, the demons strength is altered' much like the moon influencing the tides of the sea, mars influences the demons power directly

Neat'o. That sounds good.