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Damien-
Thoroughly enjoyed the narrative and how the concluding line slightly disrupts its linearity- 'please come home' reads almost like an echo, a far outcry of the boy's plight, somewhat removed from the scene, although very much a part of it.
This piece strikes me as a tale of regression - encountering the younger self, or else the alter ego through the gaps of time. Well-done.
One nit:
our writer of what was
^ Why 'our'? In an attempt to engage the readers, you may have alienated them by ascribing an attitude with which they might not agree. And, I'm uncertain as to who the writer is - whether he is the author of the letter or not.
Fine work.
Best,
Mirror
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