Shawn

I will just add one warning: format extravaganza.

biggest bad

im the biggest
T-H-E
the baddest
fag of the west
(mid-west)

never mind those other
p0serS
i step, i stop, i smell
for no1

rainbowflags bow their bends
before me;
make the flag possess
me

every curve, every flip,
e-v-e-r-y beat caress me
All of me

But why is it
every day
is a trip; stumbling

bold and
lonely?

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Baron

As a pictorial work and on a personal statement level this works. I think that the gimmicks compensate for content in this one. Not the best that I've seen from you but given the standards you set yourself that doesn't make it bad.

Rob

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Asphodelus

I really like this, especially with the unusual structure. It's a quicker poem then some, but is if anything better because of it.

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"All right...I'm glad it's a girl. And I hope she'll be a fool — that's the best thing a girl can be in this world, a beautiful little fool."- Daisy

MisterSpider

You can have all the gimmicky font tricks you want, but it won't make it a poem.

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Shawn

Yes... it's the words that tend to do that job.

Especially when they've been printed on the pages of several magazines and won several contests.

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MisterSpider

Oh, so if it gets published it's good. I'm so silly not realizing that. Please continue with what you're doing - you're perfect!

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Shawn

Not at all. I was just pointing out that I can do what I wish with my own work, and that I don't need derision from having a bit of fun.

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MisterJack

Not usually a big fan of gimmicky pieces, but this one works quite well for me, Shawn.

Thanks for sharing

Jack

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