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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
05-17-2008, 08:18 PM
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Wordsmith
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And Eleanor Rigby?
Last edited by Baron : 06-03-2008 at 04:27 PM.
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05-18-2008, 03:13 AM
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Not a fan of the Beetles, but I do like the references and the way you've constructed this is superb, Baron. I must confess to not being keen on your more recent material, it just read too obvious. THIS, however, is much much better. Back to the style I used to enjoy reading from you, along with the LA pieces, they stood as my favourites of yours. Keep knocking these pieces out mate, they're worth it.
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05-18-2008, 12:28 PM
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I'm obviously at my best when I'm bored and passing the time in an airport lounge, Jack  |
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05-18-2008, 04:04 PM
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As you know, I've enjoyed your latest experiments, Rob, and this is no exception. I truly did enjoy the read. I have nothing to crit.
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05-19-2008, 06:09 AM
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Hi Baron
my granddad likes the Beatles
x Drew
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05-19-2008, 10:14 AM
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hey man, i really like this. maybe it was borne out of boredom, but it just made my day.
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05-20-2008, 07:57 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by surfacetoday
hey man, i really like this. maybe it was borne out of boredom, but it just made my day.
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honoured to get some positive input from you. thanks for the comment. |
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05-21-2008, 04:34 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Mermaid on the breakwater
As you know, I've enjoyed your latest experiments, Rob, and this is no exception. I truly did enjoy the read. I have nothing to crit.
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Thanks for the input. Appreciated. |
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05-21-2008, 06:25 PM
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I am very surprised that this has had so few reviews. well done with this one, me old son.
Considering the poems that are being bumped, this is a truly strange development.
Last edited by Mermaid on the breakwater : 05-21-2008 at 06:27 PM.
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05-22-2008, 06:21 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Mermaid on the breakwater
I am very surprised that this has had so few reviews. well done with this one, me old son.
Considering the poems that are being bumped, this is a truly strange development.
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Thanks for the thought.   |
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05-22-2008, 12:09 PM
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i saw across the universe and didn't hate it...and i like your poem...so maybe i do like the beatles....
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05-22-2008, 09:31 PM
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Totally not a Beatles fan, even though I am old enough to remember them, sort of. This was clever and enjoyable. How often is that said about poetry?
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05-23-2008, 07:27 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by jellyfish
Totally not a Beatles fan, even though I am old enough to remember them, sort of. This was clever and enjoyable. How often is that said about poetry?
jel
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Thanks for the comment. I'm glad that it entertained. |
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05-23-2008, 10:24 PM
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I especially enjoyed the scope of this poem, and the references in and of themselves were well-connected. My main issue is that I hear the song in my head when I read the lines, and it interferes with your take on the rhythm quite supremely... I think this college uses the words to great effect, but not their context.
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05-24-2008, 06:55 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Ilasir Maroa
I especially enjoyed the scope of this poem, and the references in and of themselves were well-connected. My main issue is that I hear the song in my head when I read the lines, and it interferes with your take on the rhythm quite supremely... I think this college uses the words to great effect, but not their context.
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Thanks for the input Ilasir. I'll give some thought to what you're saying. |
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