Originally Posted by MisterJack

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As I roll out of my skin --------------------------( six enters to entertain the drain of morning hangovers
and rise from the river
like the bubbles in fine champagne,
they tell me I’m built with stolen parts.

____I crust and steal a vein -------------------( droughts hapless musing Fates /scarecrows/Gretel so deveined!
____to amuse myself

Shame bites with ugly teeth; ----------------( lovely semi-colon/recaps wasted petals/love the pane!
a wildcat with razor eyes
on the monkey
that breaks my lifeless back.--------------------------(wildcat/razor/eyes/monkey on my back

Now I lay with sand, ----------------------( Misterjack recalls the scared tinman?/lay/sand/egg on face/bereft/drains ....
swollen and forgotten
like soldiers dipped in dry egg
discarded with the surplus drains.
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