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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 05-05-2008, 06:39 AM   #1
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The Witness

The Witness

"Hail!" pronounced his wretched soul
The longsword forged from depths below
is pointed skyward, towards the birds
A silver toungue --
such righteous words

"I've come from lands far, far away
to meet you on this dreary day"
When asked "For what?",
he'd kindly say
"To spread the word of God"

"I have no interest in the lord"
I turned my back and slammed the door...
though on my stoop he'd still remain
for 14 nights... and 15 days...
If I adopt his blind belief
perhaps he'll walk away?

"I love our God!"
I spoke quite stern
"All which you've taught
have I now learned"
"You've saved me from
eternal burns and
shown me Jesus Christ!"

"Be on your way now, fellow faithful
with no intent of being hateful!
I've simply several... prayers... to say
Good luck my friend...
a shame you couldn't stay."

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Old 05-05-2008, 11:09 AM   #2
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Good poem though slightly confusing. The rhyme scheme and lay out is mind-boggling but I can empathise with the "I" in the poem.
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