Writers Forum - WritingForums.com Home Rules FAQ Members Groups Calendar Gallery Search
» Sign Up «

Welcome to Writing Forums, one of the fastest growing writing communties on the web.

You are currently viewing our boards as a guest which gives you limited access to view most discussions, articles and photo galleries. By joining our free community you will be able to talk with other writers, get feedback on your work to improve your writing skills, discuss ideas, share tips & tricks, network and make friends!

Registration is fast, simple and absolutely free so please, join our community today!

If you have any problems with the registration process or your account login, please contact support.
  Search Forums
Lit.Org - Bootcamp for writers. Post your work and other writers review it, it's that easy.

Advanced Search



Go Back   Writers Forum - WritingForums.com > Creativity > Poetry
Register FAQ Members List Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

Reply
 
Thread Tools
Old 05-04-2008, 10:00 PM   #1
Profound Writer
 
Edgewise's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2007
Location: Chicago
Gender: Male
Posts: 1,300
Edgewise is an unknown quantity at this point
Colors

See,
Orange moonlights as sunlight,
Drawing the populace to civil modes,
Connect the dots yourself;
Node to node regression,
Tinkering with the spectrum,
Sipping nectar in Olympus,
If it were only as simple as flicking a switch,
Than we could all be sticklers,
To the awkwardly Orwellian manifest.

Anthropomorphic blues, accrued with the test of time,
Drawing lines in the sand with a box of tutti-frutti crayons,
Take a shot of primordial slime and evolve seven-fold,
Fission reactor insolence; liquored up on Darwinism.

The mission spills crimson across the commissioned system,
War peaks with success before crashing to the floor,
Doors slam in the face of the founding foundation policy,
Civilization odyssey; to bring culture to the heathens,
Crusades peter out, fitful to the last drop of plasma,
Brothers, fathers, sons will be atomically reconstructed.

Fade to black.
__________________
How can you expect a man who's warm to understand a man who's cold?
- Solzhenitsyn "Ivan Denisovich"
Edgewise is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 05-05-2008, 03:41 PM   #2
Profound Writer
 
Join Date: Nov 2007
Location: Oxford
Gender: Male
Posts: 1,350
MisterJack is on a distinguished road
L9, S1, should that be 'Then'? instead of 'than'?? Not that I'm a 'stickler' or anything

Like the references in this but reading more times before I comment further.

Jack
__________________
If it claims to be God, eat it.

--------------
MisterJack is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 05-05-2008, 04:04 PM   #3
Wordsmith
 
Baron's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2007
Location: On course
Gender: Male
Posts: 6,875
Baron is on a distinguished road
Send a message via MSN to Baron Send a message via Skype™ to Baron
I agree with Jack about the "then/than" issue. A solid read, Edge.
Baron is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply


Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are Off
Pingbacks are Off
Refbacks are Off


All times are GMT -5. The time now is 12:57 AM.
Powered by vBulletin, Copyright ©2000-2007, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
LinkBacks Enabled by vBSEO 3.1.0


 
You are NOT Logged In.
User Name:

Password



Newsletter

Subscribe to Majestic
the official newsletter of Writing Forums and lit.org
Email:


Related Links

Link to Us:
Writing Forums - Discussions for Writers