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Old 05-04-2008, 09:54 PM   #1
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I Speak

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I Speak

O, civil toungue
reverse thy prayer,
embrace thy guilt,
pretend to care
Instill the fear
into our lives
with tears for our demise...

Now relish in your sacrifice
the pain instilled,
the peaceful lies
Entice me with your false mistrust
the love of Jesus Christ...

Manipulate us lowly man
Scream "Fire and brimstone!",
God's commands --
Remind us of those sinner's fates
Mere victims to The Judge's hand

I speak...
What gain we through our sacrifice?
Some perfect, unseen paradise?
The subtle love of Jesus Christ?...
Such things untouched,
unseen, unknown --
I only trust my sight



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I Speak

O, civil tounge
reverse thy prayer,
resist the guilt,
pretend to care
Instill the FEAR
into our lives
with tears for our demise...
Now relish in your sacrifice
the love, the hate,
the FEAR, the lies
Entice me with your false mistrust
the love of Jesus Christ
-Shabooki Skittles

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