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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
05-07-2008, 02:18 PM
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It's soooo deep I lost myself in your depth, heh.
I think dawdling sounds a mite off. Dwelling sounds better to me.
Over all it was a really good piece, congrats.
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05-08-2008, 03:16 AM
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Wordsmith
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Thanks all for the comments
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05-08-2008, 08:13 AM
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I love it.
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05-10-2008, 04:49 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Baron
Know Thyself?
I took the dictum, --------------------( reason is treason foolish with masturbatory faith, but bit by bite bereft of love
“Know thyself,” and tried
to find this person -
but the search exposed
____a wealth
____of grief
and a very painful lesson.
____If ------------------------------( unknowable essence of apostles, i can almost hear the Protestant Reformation
you understand it, then
____it isn’t God, -----------------------( Truly shocked by this part! I'm so glad ewe get it true
Augustine wrote,
to impart the tiniest bit
in understanding
____who I’m not.---------------------(Wow, see/know/god/write/bit/part/knot or not?
“To thine own self be true”, --------------( Socratic prose, thanks for laughter inside linking gnostic theology to Hellenistic thought
said Will, a worthy proposition;------------(back to Elizabethan period to the lunacy of the psychological psychosis foolish with
this proves to be ------------------------(addiction to science & the bitter pill
____a bitter pill
____when I know
my disposition;----------------------(will/Will/pill/know/disposition/dispensation ... lovely
for I get lost in dire denial, --------------------------------( your composition recalls the Nile!
living compromise;---------( I think John said, "So because you are lukewarm, and neither hot nor cold, I will spit you out of My mouth."
with all my truths --------------( compromise is a terrible gift or grift
now placed on trial,
dawdling with dark doubt -------(FAITH!
____and lies.
These philosophical gleanings, -----------( Great intro/recalls Millet and medieval finally together/believe still though you don't know me
____a painful ---------------------( for we are the universe inside
mental labour -----------------( laboring for Hegelian laughter
____that reveals --------------------------------( that enjoy's the enjambments of St.John
my lack of meaning ----------------------( reveling Byronic meter, mentioned as thoughtful meanderings
and the need ---------------------- ( weeding a frond to a friend
____to find ----------------( aghast at finding a candle under the bowl is New Being in Jesus as Christ prancing Platonic with Sakyamuni
_________a saviour -----------------------( I thirst for More!
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Gosh, just lovely, Baron.
Last edited by peterphreak : Yesterday at 12:47 PM.
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Yesterday, 09:37 AM
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Thanks Damien
Last edited by Baron : Yesterday at 12:22 PM.
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Yesterday, 12:23 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by peterphreak
Gosh, just lovely, Baron.
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I appreciate the time that you put into your analysis Peter. I sometimes think that your analyses are better than the poems. 
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Yesterday, 12:49 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Baron
I appreciate the time that you put into your analysis Peter. I sometimes think that your analyses are better than the poems. 
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Dear Baron,
Don't blame me, blame her Eyes. Something about someone better than me, makes me stop and smell what's arisen in the rank. Some, i guess will become composers, but we'll all become compost some day. Thanks God.
Last edited by peterphreak : Yesterday at 01:14 PM.
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Today, 06:58 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by peterphreak
Dear Baron,
Don't blame me, blame her Eyes. Something about someone better than me, makes me stop and smell what's arisen in the rank. Some, i guess will become composers, but we'll all become compost some day. Thanks God.
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Some have achieved your predicted end before their time. 
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