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Old 04-28-2008, 11:27 PM   #1
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Silicone

For a half-hour, I laugh with sour sugar coated dreams,
Scheming for the bankroll, now villains laugh with the disease,
Cut them in for a deal, laughter doesn’t come cheap,
Or free, if it were up to me, I’d let them laugh to their graves,
And steal their nickels to buy off the waitress,
Who just witnessed the foolishness,

Of a cackling lunatic aching,
For a wish and, perhaps, a toothpick.

Pens severed from the nonsense of possessing six senses,
“WHAT THE FUCK IS A THIRD EYE?”
I decline to define it,
But I will refine it to perfection,
Past the Bukowski stage of development,
Burroughs?
Don’t’ make me laugh!
To read him, you need a helmet,
Since when is genius,
Measured in shock?

Reality is the best E.E.D. to wit,
Pitting delusions against the truth,
Where failure is a comfort,
Some cynics coined the term:
Perspective,
As if that changes a thing,
Because if nobody is right,
Than what is the point of being?



Wrong.
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Old 04-28-2008, 11:45 PM   #2
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Effective piece. Very visible first-person lends a new strength. Conversation flows vividly from hope to anger to disdain to enlightenment (with just a tiny bit of resignation).
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Old 04-29-2008, 01:17 AM   #3
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Amazing piece of poetry. Very nice.
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Old 04-29-2008, 01:39 PM   #4
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Yes, this is a superb piece, Edgewise. Very emotive and this flows so well. Nothing but praise for this mate.

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Old 05-03-2008, 03:36 PM   #5
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Thanks folks.
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Old 05-03-2008, 10:16 PM   #6
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I guess I am not a good poetry reader or writer as this so called Poem had no meanng or wow factor for me. It didn't make any sense to me. Has to be my age or something to that effect. My Simon Cowel(American Idol) Mood coming out. (- :
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