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Old 04-28-2008, 06:47 AM   #1
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Distance

Distance

From the porch
I stare at the Easter Island head
that grows a mile distant,
stands guard, a totem,
while miles away my son
plays in the snow, grows
into someone I am yet to know.

The head’s lips pout -
does he know he’s the last?
Not another to be built,
only the wind and water
to erode the face
so plain already.

In the mountains my son
reads another letter
and here at home I wait
for a reply, my face,
reminiscent, stares across
time’s ruffled water.

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Old 04-28-2008, 05:51 PM   #2
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I've commented on this on another forum and I'm honestly amazed that it's received no input here. Some great imagery and just the right balance of emotion. I'll be very disappointed if you edit this one.

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Old 05-03-2008, 05:56 PM   #3
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Old 05-03-2008, 11:21 PM   #4
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The head's lips pout...ruffled water. You're not kidding.
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Should that be 'Easter' on line 2?

Liked this, dannyboy.

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Old 05-05-2008, 05:50 PM   #6
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