ShabookiSkittles

Despise the beating Sun
Blame her for your troubles and run
Recognize nothing... and no one
Throw some coals into the furnace
and watch them burn
while you absorb the aftershocks --
the twists and turns inside of you
Do all which you see
and ignore what you do
Despise the beating Sun
She's coming for you...

winkash

Here I see a contrast between sensing an urgency and living as though it would not be there.
"She" is death itself?

I like it. Why is it called Sol?
Ah! As others here taught me: 4th line, 1st word: do you mean "throw"?

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Baron

Another enjoyable read. No crits as is but I think that you might play around a little more with line breaks.

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Lorlie

Hi there SS

This was an interesting piece to come back to, I liked the flow, but was not a fan of the intermittent capitals, A thing I used to do, and this place made me a non fan of it.

AND THERE, I change my mind, because I have just read it through once more, and now it seems perfectly placed.

OK... I really like this.

Good stuff.

Lorlie

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GridCanal

I like this phrase... it's my favorite one out of the whole poem...
Throw your anger and let it burn, like an endless flame. I like the metaphor.

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