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Old 04-15-2008, 07:36 PM   #1
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Memories of a Killer

Teardrops cut deep into my sanity
These walls imprison me in ghostly white
To this light above now, I awaken
But inside me, my soul is black as night

Wondering helps me get through every day
Thinking makes me hate my family more
Why my parents sent me here I do know
I pushed my sister out of the car door

Watching her fall to the pavement below
My eyes were drawn to this horrific sight
Her head split open and blood rushed out
And it glistened in the shining sunlight

My parents were screaming, rage in their eyes
I sat with no expression on my face
But then my laughing broke the silence
They stared at me as if I was insane

We walked to the body, all blood and gore
A crowd of people had gathered around
I stood by her head and lifted my foot
And brought it down with a bone-crunching sound

So hence I am here, alone in this cell
With this jacket holding me in restraint
But I can get loose, take my hidden gun
And with my warm blood these walls I will paint
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Old 04-15-2008, 07:45 PM   #2
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cut it down, show not tell. I will come back to this later.
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With every passing thought I weep/
Lead me into nights dark bliss/
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