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Old 02-29-2008, 04:04 PM   #1
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I walk within the mew musk of an assassin
and reflect a loss in languid emotion spent
exhausted;
creature battles and checkpoint charlies with nostrils of steel
kiss the trip wire as his army drapes you olive.

This man who bleeds in oval shapes
a nightfall with no creek to follow
Ciphers death swathing bluish and ablaze
While war drinks coffee black in sweetened sorrow

Eyes to see the abstract color of a god in underbrush
His blackened heart berry bramble beauty bleeds
The silent song spotted under parts sings the thrush
A song of life full, teasing tickle time and need

And one by one we march by self made graves in protest
Diseased
Minds and purloined jester chuckles, illusion in peace.
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Last edited by SerenityJS : 02-29-2008 at 10:34 PM. Reason: I got rid of winter wonderland.....I agree, cliche...
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Old 02-29-2008, 06:40 PM   #2
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I absolutely love this! Brilliant poem!
Great imagery, and delivered perfectly.
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Old 02-29-2008, 06:56 PM   #3
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I've read this a few times now. To be honest the first time I read it I saw the "winter wonderland" cliche in the first line and just shrugged off the whole poem. Coming back, I read beyond that and would agree that apart from that this is a very good poem.
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Old 02-29-2008, 10:30 PM   #4
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thank you both for your reply....I will get rid of winter wonderland.....thanks jen
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