MisterJack

Any closer and I'll have to start calling you 'friend'

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MisterJack

You can check my user profile if you really want the clues. Thanks for reading and I'm glad you like it's essence

Jack

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Baron

Gone fishing with a couple of bottles of scotch.

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MisterJack

Sounds good. This is 2002, preparing to ride up the Col d'aubisque. Freezing cold, winding road, mirky atmosphere. The sun came out for us in the afternoon though. Didn't make the top in one hit but got a good ride out just the same. Beautiful part of the world.

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SadLuckDame

Dang it, I thought you were out ice-skating with a pretty lady, who leaned over and nipped ya on the lip. I liked it vague, smile. Nice work MisterJack

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Well, it was a nice check, Kitty, and really I might have won, if it hadn't been for that nasty Knight, that came wriggling down among my pieces. Kitty, dear, let's pretend -- -" And here I wish I could tell you half the things Alice used to say, beginning with her favorite phrase "Let's pretend."
written by Lewis Carroll

MisterJack

Thanks Sad. Though your version sounds pretty good to me


Jack

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dannyboy

doesn't work for me Jack. I like the idea - in fact I think its a terrific idea but you do not take me there. Lately I keep thinking about metaphor and about the real intention behind all this shit we write. Is it just to plonk down words to remind us of something - or is this experience of yours somehow a metaphor for something much larger. If it is, then give me the metaphor, give me the large, if not, well then that's okay, it's just not what I'm searching for.

Iseult

I know nothing about you, seeing as I like the poem and wanted to take it at face value. Don't know if you specifically drew on the coldfang allusion, I'm going to assume you did because it stands out a mile above anything else in the poem for me. That being the case it casts everything in it's shadow. I don't get winter when I read this, for me the entire poem is a lost and frightened character. The path chosen by them doesn't look too appealing anymore, if ever, and anything surrounding them is also less than inviting. To me the poem has a very hunted and lost theme to it, and whether you wanted that or not, it's very prevalent from beginning to end. I read as though the person written about, stole or hid something that brought happiness, perhaps for very selfish reasons of wanting it only for themselves. To me this is backed up by the coldfang biting into that which hid/stole the sun/sunshine. What's more, the figure written about seems to be suffering from prickling of conscience and is now only waiting for the other shoe to fall and "bite" him/her again. That being said, for some reason I think of the personality in the poem as male.

MisterJack

That's interesting as some of what you say has some sense. There certainly was anticipation, the cold is never welcoming either. As for the 'Col's Fangs', the Col d'aubisque is a central figure in this yes. They bit into more than the overcast also, left a list of fond memories and a wish to return.

Thanks for reading and your observations. Most interesting

Jack

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