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Old 02-05-2008, 10:37 AM   #16
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Thanks Apple, it's always good to hear from you and get your nod of approval


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Old 02-05-2008, 10:43 AM   #17
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Ending is better now. Good work Jack.
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What happened to the ending? I came back to read it again and it was gone. I like it how it was ...
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Old 02-06-2008, 09:27 AM   #19
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Thanks Van and Matt.
The trouble with this type of scenario, everyone has differing opinions and weighing up which direction to take is very awkward and some people will disagree with the decision.

I'm personally happy with this ending, but I also liked the previous ending.

Thanks for reading and comments everyone.

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