Fraxinus

Sorry to put up another poem so soon, I think I'm a little addicted!
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The Fear Of Three

When I was young
it reached only three -
the dreaded count of doom.
At two and three quarters
be good,
be still, or

SMACK!
UP TO YOUR ROOM!

In years to come
mock those, we would -
Scarred
by the fear of three.
The sound checker's curse.
One. Two.
Two. One.

They never counted three.

But times, they change,
and now - you're three,
the count,
it starts at five.
Doom comes at one,
but at two you run
to me;

your doom deprived.

The fear of three
You shall not know,
for those days -
they are gone.
At night it is whispered,
the feared mantra,
reciting;

One. Two. One. Two.
Two. One.

Baron

I think that this is an interesting piece of work but I see it more as a formatted flash piece than as a poem.

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Wishing4Rain

This is really good, I enjoyed reading it and I have no crit's. Though it seems to me this is more of a song than a poem. It was original, in my opinion at least. Well written, good job.

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Fraxinus

Thanks Baron and Wishing for taking the time to read this.

Baron; I've never written any flash fiction, so I'll have a look into it and see how to put it into that form.