rksingh

"To see you naked
is to recall the Earth"
says Garcia Lorca

it's no sin to love
strip naked in bed, kitchen
or prayer room

the bodies don't shine
all the time nor passion
wildly overflows

but when we have time
we must remember the parts
arouse the dead flesh

rub raw with desire
peeling wet layers through light
sound, senses and taste

play the seasons:
the thirst is ever new
and blissful too

to recreate
the body, a temple
and a prayer


--R.K.SINGH

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Pete_C

There are some interesting images, but for me it lacks something with regard to an overall theme, a strong definition, a sense of something happening.

rksingh

Hi, Pete_C. Thanks for taking note of my poem. I think you have alreadynoticed the positive side of the poem. It makes a statement on what happens but generally not viewed so positively. I wrote it as a tribute to human body and its sheer physicality and sensuality . Sex is something good, as good as divinity itself. God created it for humans to love and respect it.
R K

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DavidBetzer

Maybe whats missing is describing people as humans?