AHardRain

some days it seems to take
to take to take
to take to take
some days it seems to take all day
everyday

so listen up and listen down
learn to whistle with the birdcalls
while the wind blows and the fresh hair freezes
like a tree branch in a storm

watch the land and
watch the sky
see the sparkles strike the night
sip that whisky from an icy glass and
wait
just wait

know no rest for the wicked
when the sun sets down and the tide is up
and the new moon sings a spectral song
alone at last
for us

Baron

About as good as I've come to expect from you. No crits, good read.

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Pete_C

I felt the mention of the cowl was out of place, but apart from that I found this a good read, and thought-provoking too.

AHardRain

made several changes

Mirror

There is an imposed vigilance to this as evinced by the repetition. I think the desired alertness (the call for a unification with nature- to accept what the latter can offer) may be conveyed within and between verses. No need for repetition to create that mood. Make your verses fluid, let them slither, let them drag.

Wishing4Rain

I liked this, I didnt see anything wrong with it. The only thing that bothered me a little, and this bothers me in any poem, was the repetition of words. Theres nothing wrong with it, for some reason it has always bothered me. I liked this one though. Good job.

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"The reason I love the rain, is so other's won't see the tears falling from my eyes."

Pete_C

"know no" might need a little more consideration. Otherwise, you are getting close to something very good. Also, try repeating the:
to take to take
to take to take

as

to take
to take

I think twice will be enought to convey a pause, a drag in time, whilst four times makes it seem a little indulgent!