ieuan

Severn,

Well going too far and having a baby can be eased by marriage, the girl isn't on her own then is she? I mean the man can help her finacially and they can both assist in raising the baby. It's much easier isn't it? Two people raising one baby, much easier than one mum on her own. If the woman was violently raped I doubt marriage would be suitable but if the girl had feelings for the man it could work with forgiveness and love for the good of the child if there was one.

If it's ok to argue I will but Foxee indicated in another post that she prefer that we move on and stop bickering.

Anyway my post was to the author not you, I notice you have done this before, hijacked a thread. You obviosly have strong feelings, why not confine them to your own posts or critiques, wouldn't that be reasonble? Or are you the self elected keeper of all politically correct thought?

What is my opinion to do with you anyway, it wasn't addresses to you at all, it was to the author.

ChestersDaughter

It was not my intention to cause such a stir with this. I was merely getting rid of excess baggage carried for 25 years. It was liberating to tell now what I didn't expose then. Rhyme, I agree, was not the best vehicle. It seems to me that the general consenus is that I am unworthy to even grasp a pen, therefore I shall set mine down. And to expect a piece of shit, with absolutely no remorse, to extend a marriage proposal is a joke, it is almost as comical as my poems. My thanks to you, Baron, what you tried to do for me was greatly appreciated.

MisterJack

Don't be detered Chestersdaughter. Keep writing and when you feel ready, I for one will be interested to see the progress and the offering.

Take care of yourself
Regards
Jack

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Baron

There are people who have commented in this thread who would not have made any encouraging suggestion had they not believed that you could achieve something, dannyboy for one. I hope that yiou give that some thought before abandoning the pen. I'm looking forward to seeing some more work from you.

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ChestersDaughter

Pouring one's soul upon a sheet of virgin white, does not a poet make
Even words etched in blood, sometimes you must forsake

Dear Baron and MisterJack, Thank you for your encouragement, I am unsure what to do at this point.

Baron

You could do a lot worse than spending some time reading Bokowski and Kerouac, even some of the more traditional poets. A good link for free e-books:

Free Poetry eBooks e-Books

And to learn and improve style:

modern poetry: its writing and appreciation

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MisterJack

Then write about it

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ieuan

I'm sorry if I have upset you, it's hard to determine the exact circumstances from the poem but I see now in your last comment it was traumatic and I am sorry if I have made it worse. I did say in my first post that rape is disgusting offence. My appology is without reservations and I hope in time you may get over it and move on.

I did think you extremly brave to write about it as you have done,. Your writing is not rubbish at all, you did your best. Maybe prose would have been an easier start for you. But please don't let my response spoil your future writings.

Regards
Ieuan

ChestersDaughter

Dear Ieuan,

No harm, no foul. I did not take offense. I did not wish to garner pity in writing this piece. I abhor being pitied, it serves no purpose.

Dear Baron and MisterJack,

Again, I thank you for your encouragement, I refuse to fall to my knees for anyone. Your advice has been more than well recieved. Regards, CD