Voodoo

Inspired from Bacon. Click the link in my sig and check that shit out. My god, some of the shit he makes.

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All races-collage;
___young man and grass,
returns stain




Rather proud of this one.

Amadeus

Bacon used to fancy me. Also, he cleaned his teeth with Vim.

heatherlouise

I like this peice but i do not understand why you have set it out this way? is it all one peice or are they three seperate poems?? either way, i like them, they sound excellent, like really amazing imagery and i tihnk the ending is brillaint. again though, i do not understand the setting of it.

Heather

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Baron

The form is haiko

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Eiji Tunsinagi

Nice one V. One I read the spoiler I was surprised I actually figured it out. Cool.

Btw interesting link...

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"nothing is perfect, nothing lasts, and nothing is finished."

"how will you go about finding that thing the nature of which is totally unknown to you?"

heatherlouise

oow, it didn't realise as it wasn't set out like Haiku normally is. thanks for clearing that up though
Heather

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Voodoo

What do you mean, it's not set up as a haiku?

heatherlouise

well, Haiku's, if i remember correctly, go by the pattern 5,7,5 for the sylables. however, yours does not. that is all i meant, it is not the traditional setting out of Haiku.

also, why was the word "Reviewer" written in spoilers??
Heather

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Voodoo

In japanese.

But I only learned this not three or four days ago.

I was making fun of the irony of a world class reviewer not knowing the difference. That's all.

heatherlouise

right, but you asked me only earlier. at the end of the day, it is not in the form of a normal haiku as someone said it was. that's all.

and i am not a "world class reviewer", but thankyou for thinking me so. no, i was just offering my opinion and a little confused as tot he setting out of it, that's all.
Heather

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Voodoo

There isn't the normal form of haiku.

It's in english. Evidently, the two reading styles must produce two different types of poetry.

As a reviewer, you should know that.

heatherlouise

well, i disagree with this, i think if you are writing Haiku, you should stick to the actual form of Haiku, which is 5,7,5. and no, i shouldn't have to nessesarily know that because i am a reviewer. and i am not a reviwer on this site, so you don't have to use that as my title.
Heather

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Baron

Snow in my shoe
Abandoned
Sparrow's nest
--Jack Kerouac (collected in Book of Haikus, Penguin Books, 2003)

I suggest that you use dear old Google to learn a little more on this subject if you are going to review it. Below is a brief extract taken from Wikepedia.

Contemporary English-language haiku
While traditional hokku/haiku focused on nature and the place of humans in nature, modern haiku poets often consider any subject matter suitable, whether related to nature, an urban setting, or even a technological context. While old hokku avoided some topics such as romance, sex, and overt violence, contemporary haiku often deal specifically with such themes.
Traditional hokku/haiku required a long period of learning and maturing, but contemporary haiku is often (and mistakenly) regarded as an "instant" form of brief verse that can be written by anyone, from schoolchildren to professionals. Many writers of modern haiku stay faithful to the standards of old hokku, however some other contemporary haiku poets have dropped such standards, emphasizing personal freedom and pursuing ongoing exploration in both form and subject matter.
Due to the various views and practices today, it is impossible to single out any current style or format or subject matter as definitive "haiku". Nonetheless, some of the more common practices in English are:

• Use of three (or fewer) lines of no more than 17 total syllables;
• Use of a season word (kigo);
• Use of a cut or caesura (sometimes indicated by a punctuation mark) to contrast and compare, implicitly, two events, images, or situations.

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Voodoo

Dear old Kerouac (I still doubt the validity of american haiku, in that term, but a better poet -- there are only a handful)

well, i disagree with this,

What do you know?

i think if you are writing Haiku, you should stick to the actual

that is the actual fucking form of haiku


form of Haiku, which is

No, it isn't.

5,7,5.
As I said.and no, i shouldn't have to nessesarily know that

Well, you should. If you know jack shit, you shouldn't be telling others are about it, because there is not a need for people who know jack shit.

because i am a reviewer. and i am not a reviwer on this site,

Then please, don't bring ignorance to my threads.

so you don't have to use that as my title.

I preferred that over another term.

But satire isn't appreciated anymore.

Baron

Satire's appreciated better than your usual methodology.

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