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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 10-29-2007, 08:16 AM   #1
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Old 10-29-2007, 08:45 AM   #2
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Refreshing. Some really good verse. The first two stanzas are very strong. I like this.
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Old 10-29-2007, 09:58 AM   #3
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I think that this one could use some pruning but still a strong piece.
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Old 10-30-2007, 11:28 AM   #4
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