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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
10-27-2007, 03:14 PM
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Whether or not it's even vestigially poetry or not is moot; it's boring. It reminds me of the guy in the pub or workplace (every one has such a guy) who boasts about his sexual achievements and prowess when you know that really all his sexual experience revolves around porn sites and some nifty right-hand action.
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10-27-2007, 03:14 PM
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Fuck, IT CAN.
Pale, arguing something so binary as
Poetry
Not Poetry
is not fucking tech.
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10-27-2007, 03:27 PM
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Stop swearing everyone, PLEASE. No need to swear on a writing forum.
Your mother would be appalled, Voo.
It seems every time someone doesn't write a poem in form, people start arguing about what is and isn't poetry. It's boring and an old topic that should not be discussed...ever. It's too tiring and never comes to a conclusion.
This is simply not a poem. It's the thoughts of a dirty old man.
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Last edited by Pale Gallery : 10-27-2007 at 03:31 PM.
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10-27-2007, 03:28 PM
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Cursing is the use of language.
"This is simply not a poem. It's the thoughts of a dirty old man."
Nothing wrong for the latter bit. It may make good material.
However, it's not a poem. Need it be repeated again? Move it to the short forum.
Last edited by Voodoo : 10-27-2007 at 03:34 PM.
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10-27-2007, 06:09 PM
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as often happens, the comments are much more interesting than the post. thanks to all the above.
john. john smut.
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10-27-2007, 06:17 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by German Voodoo
Cursing is the poor use of language.
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10-27-2007, 06:20 PM
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If you're to quote me, don't Misquote me.
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10-27-2007, 06:26 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by German Voodoo
If you're to quote me, don't Misquote me.
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I'm so sorry! I simply meant to help you edit where I thought you forgot a word. |
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10-27-2007, 06:28 PM
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Cursing is good language. I use it constantly.
Quote me? Quote that, and don't fuck it up.
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10-27-2007, 09:46 PM
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lol, just lol.
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10-27-2007, 11:42 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Jaguar
German Voodoo, you need to watch your mouth for one. I don't appreciate being called a stupid fuck.
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Shhh! Don't say anything. Let him continue with what he knows best; with any luck the mods will ban him again, and hopefully next time it will be permanent.
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Last edited by The Backward OX : 10-27-2007 at 11:53 PM.
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10-27-2007, 11:48 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Baron
Any idea can be written into a poem. How well depends on the skill of the writer. If you lack the skill then you can always call a piece of bad prose poetry and argue that there are no rules in poetry.
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You heard it here first, folks!
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10-28-2007, 12:56 AM
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Wow, this whole thing turned into quite a fight.
In a desperate attempt I’m going to try to keep this a little bit more on topic.
I personally thought it was a bit too graphic. There is potential to make this into something meaningful, but its not quite there yet. Right now the whole purpose of this seems to be to arouse the reader. This is fine. However, it could be made into a more artful way of arousal. Perhaps use some metaphor or simile. Throw some more imagery about. Make it into something more that just a sex scene.
My two cents, you may go back to your fight now
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